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Read MoreIt's all for Ishtar, the sacrifice will soon be completeHe needs to find a virgin, for his Egyptian bloody feast He's gonna rip out her tongue, slice off her face, gouge out her eyesThe blood will continue to flowWhen it...
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Thank you Fia.
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Powerfully penned, Keith. I see the festivities are in full swing for horror month. Amazing write per usual, you’re the Dr. Seuss of horror my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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HAHA! Thanks man.
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Read Morejust a permanent scab the one you constantly pick i’m the back you stab the one vice you can’t kick everything feels so heavy with this weight i carry why don’t you tell me how i’m not so scary unable to speak the truth so we repeat a...
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I’m big on the closing lines of a poem. What an impact they make. It’s the impression your reader walks away with, that stays in your head like a song you can’t shake. The lost loves and the unrequited loves are always on my hit list. You nailed this one, Damian…so good!
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Kelly. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I agree with you, coming from a lyrical background, I always love a good line. But the beginning and ending are very important indeed. Appreciate you.
Damian
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This was hidden? Man, this was screaming to be let out. “No winners because the race was fixed.” Yup.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Fia. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I wrote this before joining DU. I love that line as well. It was screaming to be let out. Appreciate you, cuz.
Damian
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The last stanza is a real ass kicker! The rhyme scheme is cool too. It’s obvious that you care about your results. It shows in your craftings. This is thought provoking, but not heavy. Well done Damian.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Mark. So glad you connected with the write my friend. It was an ass kicker, I penned this during a time of self-therapy and reflection. I’ve always cared, always executing is another story. This was a cool discovery, because I had forgotten about it. lol. Appreciate you.
Damian
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I too enjoyed the rhyme scheme. Everyone can relate to this. We’ve all been there.
When you both know it was over a few months back!
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Adel. So glad you connected with the write my friend. It’s a relatable story indeed. Appreciate you.
Damian
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wow dearest Damian so much power and passion in this I am floored ❤️great write…
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Brenda. So glad you connected with the write my friend. It was a very reflective time in my life to say the least. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Now aint that the truth so bloomin well poemed .. Say it like it is why don’tcha eh .. Great ink Damian & subsequently awarded Nev’s dubble 👍👍
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Neville. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Sometimes you gotta say it loud and proud. Honored to receive the dubble. Appreciate you.
Damian
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This is dark, deep, and brilliant, Damian. I’m glad you dug it out of the vault! The honesty in this poem is cutting, and the final lines–“instead of owning we rented / while love got strangled” –are a phenomenal, memorable finish. A wicked good read.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Roma. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Those final lines are my favorite as well. It was penned in a time of self-reflection, and getting to really know myself. Without my addiction clouding my vision. Appreciate you.
Damian
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“another moment dies”
That’s the thing people lose sight of. Once the moment is gone…it’s gone. What we make of it bears a lot of weight. I’d rather carry honest weight than the baggage of pretense. I’m glad you found this one. It needed to breathe, my friend
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Willow. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Spot on in your analysis as always, it did need to breathe a little. It was simmering on the stove in the word kitchen. lol. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Damian, great rhyme and flow while delivering a strong message.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Wally. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Hard hitting piece. So true my friend. kick-ass write Damian.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Keith. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Read MoreIn blackened dreamsa mist descends from the hills Unsuspecting Only the dust moves,like a funeral veil of melancholy Sorrow The traveler of unknown plainsthrough darkness & light Confusion Flowers of desirable bloomLethal in touch and smell Death
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This feels haunting and ethereal. The imagery of mist, dust, and fatal blossoms captures that eerie beauty of twilight so well. A powerful blend of melancholy and mystery.
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Hi Romaj. Thanks for the feedback. Appreciated!
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Very scary walk. I love the description.
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Perfect for the time of year. Thanks Fia.
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I love this twilight mood in the forest which you describe perfectly here. A little dangerous, magical and most mystical! A mind blowing imagery in this awesome poem, my friend!
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Thanks my dear friend…Always!
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Powerfully penned, Keith. Into the book it belongs! Dig this, brother. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thanks Damian. You rock!
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Over deliciously penned, my friend.
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Your comments are very gracious. Appreciate it
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Damn was not going to survive anyway. It was his time. I feel sorry for him
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Don’t feel sorry for him. I heard he was a troublemaker. Thanks Fia.
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Shit happens.. Again one of your wonderfully sarcastic poems, dear Keith!
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Yes it does. Thanks Elke.
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Powerfully penned, Keith. It’s that time of year, when you tell halloween stories. With a name like, Rusty Trombone, he was dealt a bad hand from the start. Appreciate you.
Damian
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It is October. Let’s get crazy. Thanks Damian.
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Your halloweenish spooky words are the best for the month…
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Your comments fulfill my devilish ideas. Thanks PAR.
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I do remember this. this line always gets me “He’s obsessed with her death, obsessed with her blood, obsessed with her demise,”
Good piece.