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Read MoreIt had been months since they witnessed the beauty of the stars twinkling in the sky. The moon itself was already a glow before the war, and now it is lost behind the constant overcast, which lingers....
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Meg, thank you as always. Good thing it is only a freewrite and I’ll be putting it together as a more tuned first draft. I see this turning into a novella.
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Read Moresome days you want affection then other days you want to be a ho your just not sure if you want to be my ho so you keep stringing me on making sure I don't stray too far with a bat of an eye and...
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Powerfully penned, Nick. Aren’t head games fun? Been there my friend. Appreciate you.
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Yeah, been there more than a few time. Thanks for the read. much appreciated.
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Well thankfully I don’t have this problem. Not that I haven’t had this problem before, and more times than I’d like to admit haha. I wrote this after a coworker of mine was telling me he hadn’t had sex in two years, and the women he tries to get with seem to string him along. Kinda reminded me of when I would have a crush, and just some women would love to keep you at a distance.
BTW: I don’t have a cleaning lady. I’m actually not that rich lol.
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Read MoreIt is post-apocolyptic America. Sometime in the 21st century, months after a thermal nuclear exchange between Russia and the United States, when nuclear winter had settled and that dark, thick veil over the sun had thinned to...
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I can seriously feel the tension in this piece, Daniel. You’re building this beautifully. My recommendations are to look at other options for the word, ‘snow’. It becomes redundant. Also, Chloe might refer to the men in the shadows as ‘bad boys’, but Gwen and the narrator may want a more specific term – something more specific or sophisticated and relevant to the circumstances.
Your writing is compelling