Nice take on the old battle of light and shadow. Not overdone, yet with plenty of detailed lines to make it strong.
well done.

Aww would you eat the snow. This is so sweet

I enjoyed this read. My favorite stanza is:

” Thousands of lives lived without you.
So I will cherish this only one.
For if I am reborn and you are not there.”

An age-old dilemma I’m afraid. Unrequited love, or at least attention. You write is a calm plea perhaps, yet we’ve all nodded our heads to your message.

This is one outstanding write Peter. Well said and very well detailed.

This is quietly heartbreaking and beautifully observed—love and life in parallel lines.

Such good writing Peter. So often, couples won’t acknowledge the other until one day there’s one less partner to walk through life with. Death hits hard and the regret of not sharing openly the feelings that still linger underneath.

Your poem narrates characters in a story of their lives. They live through your words. This is so well done.

Thank you Thomas and Tim for your thoughtful and kind remarks.
I share most of my writing with anyone other than my wife.I wonder how much great poets of the past shared works with their partners.

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Powerfully penned, Peter. Excellent write my friend. This is amazing storytelling at its finest. Appreciate you.

Damian

This is sad and the description of how things even though you are doing what you must day to day you forget that the partner must be taking care of just like everyone and everything else

This is probably the way it is for most older couples. Yet always at least parallel, not veering away. Close enough for a hand to hold, to acknowledge the other. I envy that, to have someday. Just to know I am not ever really alone. As bittersweet as it can seem, it is also a reward unto itself. That commitment to stay so near, even if it seems a bit far at times. Hearts have a way…
Wonderful write. Poignant and pin-point.

Powerfully penned, Amethyste. I haven’t always been a fan of mine either. Appreciate you.

Damian

As time marches across mine I get that feeling off and on. Simple but powerful