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Fia Naturie posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
Okay, I am stuck with this, but I am trying.
Was born with eyes wide open
To be prepared for the truth
No one seemed to care or wanted to offend
What had happened on the roofTime withholds memories in a box
We crawl, then stand, and eventually walk
As a rusty key enters an unforgiving lock
Uttering words before learning to talk6 Comments-
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I am going to. By next week it should be better.
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I hope so … the topic is very interesting, if you can get it into proper Sonnet format. : )
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I’m trying
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For examples, you might read and study some of my posted sonnets, applying what you’ve learned from the lesson to become a bit more familiar with the Sonnet format … you should have it down by next week’s session. It doesn’t have to be perfect, just show a basic understanding we can build on.
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okay
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Read MoreMidsummer season on my wintry lips, these modern symptoms from antiquated sorrows. The sunlight of acceptance, and midnight of isolation. Youthful blushes and the wrinkles of experience, I have the free will to question my fate. This wealth of imagination, and the poverty of my reality. The...
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Your imagination is a beautiful flowering garden, you are a wealthy man, dear Daniel! Your wording is awesome. You are a master in using the stylistic device of contrasts!
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Daniel this is sublime in its dark vision. You have so much to say in your poem here and I for one am really liking what you wrote. Though dark it has a flow that is mesmerizing.
John
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Read MoreThere is a crack in my mind and everything flows into it. My head floods with such intensity, I drown in my own little world. I look through my eyes, nothing is what it seems. Blinded I am from the truth. Lost... oh, so lost! Where...
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Powerful, insightful and honest.
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This just flows and sings the song of darkness in an engaging way. I could feel your words deep in my marrow.
John
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Read MoreI do not know anymore if you are dead or alive. Your moonlit face, no more can I recognize! Your eyes are twin suns arisen, sometimes manic, sometimes depressed. Hibernating beneath your eyelids, over your nightscape a brilliant aurora! As manic as the midnight sun, as depressed as...
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Read MoreHIBERNATIONI have a windowless closetin my apartment that Isometimes lock myself inand use it as a deprivation chamber.I know that sounds weird butit shuts me off from all stimuli.Locks are on the inside.I have my knife with meI use...
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Closets and cemeteries are nice places for isolating yourself from the outside world.
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Fia, you really need to study the lesson more thoroughly for a complete understanding.