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Fia Naturie posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
This is my Free verse
Do you hear the sun?
As the rays beat down on the ground,
It is subtle but poignant
It’s purpose is to burn.
The exquisite heat,
does not match the coolness in your eyesDo you smell the wind?
Multicolored in its complexity
Surrounds you,
Invades your very core.
It gives you life.
Then withdraws to take your b…Read More![Profile Photo]()
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I’ll work on it. Thanks for the guidance
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You make sharing a distinct pleasure. 🙏
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Read MoreEvery time I write a lineI take some more spaceI create a limbA jawI am hollowAnd fainted in real worldI create myselfOnly in poetry.
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beautifully said truth ❤️
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Thank you.
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Beautifully penned, Amethyste. So much power you pack in this short form. Sometimes less is more, excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Nice to talk to you my friend.
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Read MoreI shall not forget the moment the light died. The glow of the candle pinched. The stout wick breathes out a fluttering string in defiance of death. But it was time to die. It was time to breathe to death. What do we all think, When...
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hello dearest Daniel darkly brilliant write observing your thoughts on death ❤️
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Read MoreHome, the encasement of my mind and body. Its foundations cracked, its roof tiles splintered, in come the tear-showers! The only home I possess floods. These bones are fractured, my soul shattered. I lock my mouth of this broken home shut, never to tell its secrets. The...
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Beautifully imagined, Fia, an excellent effort!
Deserves a VERY strong title!
ISSUES TO CONSIDER:
1. Unnecessarily Capitalizing every line, which tends to confuse when one complete line, thought, etc; begins or ends, effectively stumbling the flow, attention, and overall magical smoothness of a poem’s captive spell.
2. Poetic voice … how a poe…Read More