That’s super fascinating history, Damian. I don’t really follow Black Sabath, but I am familiar with that particular tune. I’m stunned that Ozzy never wrote lyrics. The dude was super fortunate to hang around people who did.

Sabbath is one of the most influential bands on earth. Whether you like Ozzy or Dio or Tony Martin, All of their line ups are special. Except the last album they did titled “13”. That’s pure shit!!
Nice work here Damian. Your a talent..Truly.

I never knew that about Ozzy. I always loved how unapologetic he was. He was just being him and that is that.

Great write

So another case of the unexpected stealing the show & in this case, saving the day! Maybe record labels should start letting the music makers do their thing & see much it nets their infamous gawdawful bottom line. Gah…another intriguing story, my friend

I didn’t expect it to go that way! I am not into short stories but that was steamy and rejuvenating. Well done, DampKitten!

Highly imaginative, Lady
Full of suspense sexuality and devotion.
It’s been a while since I have read story telling this good
Reminds me of the old erotica short stories I used to
read when I was younger

Great job DK

Naaj

Indie, thank you so much for reading and your specific recommendations. I’m sure you realize that the name, Charlie, was specifically chosen to surprise the reader in the way you mentioned – still, I like your idea to make it more obvious when the curtain finally rises on her identity. I’ll check on the parking lot as well.

Thank you, HJ! I’m glad you liked it!

Powerful work. Hot. Well crafted and steamy.

Beautifully penned, DK. A steamy erotic write, with fabulous storytelling, and an incredible imagination my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

Brilliantly written. Well executed. Sex, sex and more sex. This is some hot motherfucking shit!

Never cease to impress. Always well written and deep (pun intended) lol. The story flows smoothly and hott hott hott 🔥 😋

I keep missing the reply button!
I love your comments as always, HJ

So are you, girl, and thank you! No apologies for tears, but kisses for cleanup!

xoxo

You’re getting good at this😉

A beautiful description of the transition to the afterlife. I’ve got chills, morbidly beautiful. I’ve enjoyed this, well done D.K xx
~P.G💋

The last stanza, I got the chills. Nice. Xoxo

Sheesh! This gave me Bram’s Dracula vibes! Excellent!

oh Peter… you haven’t seen anything yet… this woman is a witch…

The whole piece is fantastic 👏 and the last stanza is remarkable poetry! Bravo!

Dark. My bed sheets will be over my head tonight after reading this. Nice!

Oh stop, Mr. Dragon! Your poetry is amazing… publication worthy. You have incredible depth and vision. I always love you insight on my stuff! Thank you!

xoxo

Damn girl, you’re good with metaphor. Love that last stanza, it’s killer..

You’re welcome. It was an enjoyable read!

Always move forward. Never in reverse. Cool poem Fia.

Thank you, Dragon-fire. I want to know what’s next.

This makes me want to chase down a Woolly Mammoth and scribble my initials on his testicles.
“We didn’t start the fire!
It was always burning
since the world’s been turning!”

Brilliantly penned, Fia. Love the flow and the imagery is stellar my friend. Nice spill. Appreciate you.

Damian

Fia, our world is ever evolving, but it’s refreshing to have you take us through time. Can’t wait to see what’ll come next. Brilliant piece my dear friend. xx
~P.G💋

Thank you P.G. Let us see what’s next

That was amazing. I love the growly voice. Damian;))

Tremendous work. You nailed it.

Cool idea with the vocals and the words are killer. Nice job Damian.

I’ve always enjoyed the voices that have gravel in their DNA. This is a little different for you but still 100% you. And brilliant! Love seeing all the facets in different light, my friend

Damian!!! Oh Damian, this is….. Wow, it’s not often I’m rendered speechless. I like the transition from your voice to the death growl. Very masculine, very sexy. It’s like that old saying, “two sides of the same coin” I think that applies here…maybe, lol. Same person, two different sides of him but they have the common goal of being released. The death growl was the cherry on top of this beautiful piece. I applaud you my friend! xx
~P.G💋

Very impressive, Damian. I really like your voice and the lyrics were perfect.

Great ink. It had a great flow.

Nice work, sir. I will write more later (I got here in a weird way and wasn’t going to leave a review at all, but I saw at the bottom of this piece there was your audio file — with another that has this piece read (horribly) by an AI voice. You can leave it if you wish, or you can delete it by adding “excludetx” as another tag on the page where you added this piece to your pages. In any case, I’ll be back when I can spend more time here. As a for
Former performance artist and now a humble poet (well, at least, a poet), I want to enjoy this at my leisure.
FD

Nice work, sir. I will write more later (I got here in a weird way and wasn’t going to leave a review at all, but I saw at the bottom of this piece there was your audio file — with another that has this piece read (horribly) by an AI voice. You can leave it if you wish, or you can delete it by adding “excludetx” as another tag on the page where you added this piece to your pages. In any case, I’ll be back when I can spend more time here. As a for
FDmer performance artist and now a humble poet (well, at least, a poet), I want to enjoy this at my leisure.