Pretty cool, Daniel. I like the visions that it creates easily for the reader. With an artistic flair of course.

The opening lines set a fragile, haunting mood that carries through the poem beautifully.

Nice.
I was told ages ago that it’s a flaw in writing to give inanimate things the ability to do conscious things, like the grass leaning to listen, as if it knew to.
Yet, I argued that in creative writing, comes a creative freedom to paint things in a different light. To give it that “as if”.
That’s what makes it more interesting and even unpredictable.
Well done poem here. I truly enjoyed it.

Dear K,

Even your summary waxes poetic. I enjoyed this piece because the inanimate had something to offer. It was a lovely image seeing and feeling the energy transfer from one thing to another throughout the write. Lovely piece. H🌷

Passionately penned, Fia. Damn, the room got hot. This one is fire my friend. Appreciate you, cuz.

Damian

Sizzling piece Fia. Well written and scorching hot. xo

amazingly penned, a tantalizing, fiery read. that’s sensually engaging.
~ c

Like this sexiness Lady, we agree that a great piece of writing can stir the loins. Tight work

This feels raw and self-aware, especially in how it explores the act of reading as intimacy. There’s a lot of honesty here.

This is some sexy voyeurism you got going on here, Fia
Steamy hot!!