This is so dark and haunting. fav line is “Their shrill shadowed the echo through these hollow halls,
“The dark-suited burial conveyance led amiss of a poet’s demise.”

Cleverly penned, Fia. Excellent write my friend, I always enjoy your amazing storytelling. Appreciate you, cuz.

Damian

Fantastic. Love it, Fia.

Why not just flush Maurice?? Get rid of the non team player! maybe he can go rule the sewers or something, LOL.
I’m just being logical! Or put his ass with a male Beta (Japanese Fighting fish). No more Maurice!

Chère F.,
I’d love it if this would find you mellow and at ease, just before the weekend.

I’ve read your poem and I don’t understand it.
blunt Dutch analysis.
But I love the kiss by Brancusi (singer museum Leiden the Netherlands) without understanding too.
I love some of Rothko’s work too.

Understanding isn’t always about what you/I can grasp at any time!
I love this write of yours and I think it’s raking me a little more time.

So:
Please be patient with me!
I’ll be back, I promise! Have a very nice weekend…..
Warm Waving from a distance, Gus

Cook Maurice and have him as an appetizer. He’d be with you forever. Great story Fia.

This starts playful but slowly tightens into something darker.
Power and cruelty don’t need much space to show themselves.

Clean slate works also. Lol

I think you’ll need to build a little underwater jail and keep Maurice there as punishment.
This was great, yes it’s frustrating that your fishes kept dying but I love how you told this story not just as the observer but almost like a deity that you had power but they kept dying on you while you weren’t looking.
Awesome work.

The Basic Law states that human dignity in inviolable. But dignity, physical and mental health have long since become the playball of abuse of power and corruption. Very well expressed. Powerful writing dear Damian!

I hate corruption. Seems that it’s becoming more obvious with no one taking charge. Awesome piece dude!

When reality warps, the shapeshifters ascend as keepers of the shifting veil.
Only those who guard the ancient flame of truth withstand the empire of forgetting.
Great words Damian.

A terrific summary of mankind’s terrifying – and worsening – predicament. Excellent Damian. Harriet-Jacqui xx

Damian this poem brings light to everything that is going on. Really good cuz.

This reads like a warning flare shot straight into the dark.
The anger is focused, and the clarity makes it hit harder.

I literally sat on my hands for a minute so I didn’t launch into immediate rant. The whole purpose of their actions is multifold, I think. First and foremost, create fear and stir up animosity and hatred. Second, fill their privately owned concentration camps for free labor. And third, though definitely not least, continue the trafficking started by the big name these days. These people need to be stopped, prosecuted and locked away forever. Powerful, my friend

Wolves are back! Big bad and naughty wolves. The Wolves you are writing about seem to be more seductive and haunting than threatening.
I’m curious to read your take on this topic.

I am slogging at the library right now reading through the first draft making revisions. About to transcribe it from my notebook to the computer so I can send it to you finally. Ughhhhhh writing is such a process, Elke! Haha 😂