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Read MoreShe steps from the showera vision of warmth and water and light. Steam still clinging to her skin,drops tracing paths down her shoulders,the air itself seems to hush for her.That towel, drawn so tight to guard her beauty.Shapes that...
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Thank you p, Sam. Grateful for your comments.
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This is so excellent. I’m really glad I read it, thanks for posting.
This particular stanza didn’t read smooth. If I may suggest…
That towel, is drawn tight
to guard her beauty.
His hands still remember
the soft curve shapes of her lovely breasts,
the gentle hollow where shadows meet.Great writing.
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Thanks for reading, and for your thoughtful analysis,Tim. I appreciate your constructive criticism very much.
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My pleasure. 🙂 Awesome poem.
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Incredible ink .. and so perfectly spilled ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐👍
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Thanks, Nev!
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really!
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Am I weird if I got aroused by this? ‘Hope so…
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hi Jim good evening not at all I’m happy to have that affect thank you ❤️
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hello beautiful good evening thank you graciously ❤️
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Seductively dark, Brenda. Incredible write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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thank you graciously dearest Damian please forgive my tardiness ❤️
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Read MoreEvery dayanother bite,another piece of my being taken.Like cloth, It shreds.Through lightning bloodmy mind mere dustat end of day.Life - the vulture,with disdainful agilitychews slowly,rips at meready to feedon my carcass.
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Cleverly penned, Tim. Speaking truth my friend, this has layers. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thanks for your input, Damian.
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Boom. You nailed it.
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ha-ha thank you, Thomas.
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I like this! I may expound on this in a different way.
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Beat my guest. 🙂
Thanks, Paula.
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Finished it. It’s entitled Alzheimer’s and it will be posted tomorrow sometime around noon. My first posting tomorrow and it will be dedicated to you.
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Then I’ll be reading it. Thank you, Paula. ; )
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You wove this metaphor brilliantly my friend. Great raw poetry that holds nothing back. Great work my friend.
John
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Read MoreIn my attic, in a dust-Leadon trunk,I found an old red jacket.It bore wrinkles and smelled of mothballs.In one pocket, I found an old smile.But in the burdensome years since I last wore it I found it no longer...
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I enjoyed this immensely.
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Thank you Peter.
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Powerfully penned, Tim. Excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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I appreciate the comment, thank you.
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hello dearest Tim this is beautiful I enjoyed the metaphors here… I don’t know how to stop hoping no matter what I pray you find belief an understanding of God as I have found him truly to be I looked at church and never found him there… then my scope widened and I found him everywhere ❤️
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Thank you for the comment, Crimsin. 🙂
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Man, I love the part where you found an old smile. The whole piece is great but something about those two words together made me smile. And no, it’s not old! lol
It gave ma a feeling of nostalgia. Wonderful write amigo!
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Thanks so much Adel. :)))
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Powerful work.
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Thanks Thomas.
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Tim, this read like a man on a quest to find the joy he once had. You took this metaphor and flew with it my friend. I could visualize the old red jacket in the trunk and you finding it and looking in the pockets for what once was. Truly great work.
John
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Read Moregentle understanding, in your depths I searchto find a way to reconcilethe wild ways of the world and your nature Fatherinside me is conflicting feelingscreative need, you admonish me you prefer my softer sidecruel desire is the way of...
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It is very bewitching. When he tells you to stay calm so his monster does not come out. nice
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hello lovely Fia he told me last night after I posted my poem he said he knows I am capable of this mischief but he prefers my softer side…I asked him further about his varied sides and he says it’s all in what side I provoke will I get from him thank you for reading and commenting ❤️
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Crimsin, both tender and fiery this poem is. He tries to elicit your soft side but his true nature brings out the lioness. Great poem as I have come to expect from you.
John
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Beautifully penned, Brenda. Incredible write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Brilliant work. Powerful.
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Brenda, you amaze me with, “of others playing on different courts.” Love that line.
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A lovely & fragile piece of poetry Brenda. You always seem to amaze. Great work here.
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