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Read MoreMelancholy sits quietly and I with herwith a gentle remider to breathewe watch the cotton candy clouds flow byas we lie watching blue skiesa stark contast to our moodhurt on a colorful dayit seems wrong and out of placethe...
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hello dearest Damian good evening thank you graciously I’m happy you liked it ❤️
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Lovely piece Brenda. The words are marvelously woven to create a delicate, fragile piece of poetry. xo
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hi dearest Keith good evening thank you my friend I can be gentle when I want to ❤️
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I wonder if that spider, doing what nature intended, ever said to himself – what a lovely day it is today?
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I don’t know dearest Tim I believe if we listen we can hear nature and the earth talk…it is at all possible…everything has a frequency thank you for your thoughts ❤️
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Such a fine verse. I really needed that. TY & hugs+++
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hello dearest Jim thank you graciously I know my metaphors are funny I’m happy it worked for you ❤️
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Read MoreShe steps from the showera vision of warmth and water and light. Steam still clinging to her skin,drops tracing paths down her shoulders,the air itself seems to hush for her.That towel, drawn so tight to guard her beauty.Shapes that...
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They are usually the reason we ever learned what longing means.. and the reason we write about it… beautiful
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Thank you p, Sam. Grateful for your comments.
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This is so excellent. I’m really glad I read it, thanks for posting.
This particular stanza didn’t read smooth. If I may suggest…
That towel, is drawn tight
to guard her beauty.
His hands still remember
the soft curve shapes of her lovely breasts,
the gentle hollow where shadows meet.Great writing.
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Thanks for reading, and for your thoughtful analysis,Tim. I appreciate your constructive criticism very much.
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My pleasure. 🙂 Awesome poem.
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Incredible ink .. and so perfectly spilled ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐👍
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Thanks, Nev!
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really!
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Am I weird if I got aroused by this? ‘Hope so…
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hi Jim good evening not at all I’m happy to have that affect thank you ❤️
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hello beautiful good evening thank you graciously ❤️
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Seductively dark, Brenda. Incredible write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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thank you graciously dearest Damian please forgive my tardiness ❤️
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Read MoreEvery dayanother bite,another piece of my being taken.Like cloth, It shreds.Through lightning bloodmy mind mere dustat end of day.Life - the vulture,with disdainful agilitychews slowly,rips at meready to feedon my carcass.
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Cleverly penned, Tim. Speaking truth my friend, this has layers. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thanks for your input, Damian.
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Boom. You nailed it.
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ha-ha thank you, Thomas.
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I like this! I may expound on this in a different way.
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Beat my guest. 🙂
Thanks, Paula.
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Finished it. It’s entitled Alzheimer’s and it will be posted tomorrow sometime around noon. My first posting tomorrow and it will be dedicated to you.
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Then I’ll be reading it. Thank you, Paula. ; )
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You wove this metaphor brilliantly my friend. Great raw poetry that holds nothing back. Great work my friend.
John
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Read MoreIn my attic, in a dust-Leadon trunk,I found an old red jacket.It bore wrinkles and smelled of mothballs.In one pocket, I found an old smile.But in the burdensome years since I last wore it I found it no longer...
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I enjoyed this immensely.
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Thank you Peter.
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Powerfully penned, Tim. Excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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I appreciate the comment, thank you.
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hello dearest Tim this is beautiful I enjoyed the metaphors here… I don’t know how to stop hoping no matter what I pray you find belief an understanding of God as I have found him truly to be I looked at church and never found him there… then my scope widened and I found him everywhere ❤️
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Thank you for the comment, Crimsin. 🙂
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Man, I love the part where you found an old smile. The whole piece is great but something about those two words together made me smile. And no, it’s not old! lol
It gave ma a feeling of nostalgia. Wonderful write amigo!
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Thanks so much Adel. :)))
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Powerful work.
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Thanks Thomas.
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Tim, this read like a man on a quest to find the joy he once had. You took this metaphor and flew with it my friend. I could visualize the old red jacket in the trunk and you finding it and looking in the pockets for what once was. Truly great work.
John
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Beautifully penned, Brenda. Excellent write my friend, really dig this one a lot. Appreciate you.
Damian