Passionately penned, Betty. Excellent write with lots of layers my friend. Crisp imagery as well. Appreciate you.

Damian

You’re waiting for the story to end. Oh my, this story is hot, it should not end.

It sizzles with a touch of noir in one’s skivvies! I like it, Betty.

Most erotica is as sexy as cold vomit, cliche and only appreciated by the sleaze pigs. You have this remarkable ability to reach inside the male mind and to deconstruct feral desires. It’s not something which usually moves me, but between my ankles and hips, your words always leave a tattoo. Great scribbling Boo.

You may not remember the fake Satanic Slut fake profile on DU? It was actually a gay male friend of mine. So outlandish and utterly bizarre, it was blatantly obvious a fake. And yet his inbox was awash with dribbling males. There’s another similar. Is there a moral to that? Probably just be aware of sad little men.

Rob x

Well, seems like you had a rough morning. Not!
As Ghosteen said, most adult poetry/prose is simply amateur porn. It takes an actual thought process to make it appealing. We use our brains too, when we have sex of any kind. So when someone can step it up to being something relatable, achievable even, for us all, then that means its good writing. So bravo to ya, for making it real for the reader.

Thank you my brother. The brain is the biggest sex organ, and I love that you pointed that out.

Thank you for the commentary. I absolutely adore you, and your opinion always matters.

Oh my. Oh my my my! Well hello Betty!
This was quite the experience to read! That sweet spot of a dream and feeling completely immersed.
Having those fantasies or dreams gets the heart going amiga. This takes vivid cardio exercise to another level.
I felt the frustration of the alarm. Noooooo!

And I love that bright smile of yours- after reading this I see why! Hahaha. No one does this better than you!

I’m so happy to see ya posted:)

Oh those 9 minutes of the snooze button…
So I almost read this while at work but upon reading the title, I opted to come back at a later time and I’m glad I did (I can’t risk people walking up behind me while read this kind of work, clutching my pearls).
Amazing. It’s every man’s fantasy and daydream, the peak of sexuality and longing wrapped up in such a hot scenario.
Now I should go for a run to get my heart going again.

Wally, that would have been a disaster! I’m glad you avoided the pearl clutching my friend.
You know I’m pro run for everything. So run your ASS off! Glad to have helped with your cardio, sweet friend.

Passionately penned, Betty. Excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

Oh-Wow! I absolutely loved this, Betty. Best wishes, Harriet-Jacqui Furl, published erotica author

Betty love your writes. Wooo

Your pieces are always so stimulating Lady, to tight

What! Betty graces us with some creative writing here! Or, also known as Lillith has entered Eden! What!

“forearm against your pelvis” = Details are everything, and this is exquisitely precise to make it a real moment. That bit of control is boss!
Well you had mentioned that you were going to concentrate on erotica. So that explains this humdinger of a write!
The way you make it so realistic, without any overly porn promotion, shows your skill, ahem, at creative writing.
Good to see you donating to the site. It’s about time!

Icon? Don’t be calling me no foreign little car made by Hundai !! I’m tall dammit!
Okay okay.
You are a premium writer, Betty. Any site goes up in value with you posting in it. It isn’t always about the subject matter. It’s the technique and ability of the writer that carries the weight. You are gold.

Gotta love the raw honesty spilling onto the page without restraint. “Are those your toes curling in the sheets?” it’s that damn good.
Nice work Betty.

LOL, thanks Wally. I appreciate you!

Make the writing the center is one of those ideas that you sit and think about what a poet or a writer does. It is their center. Interesting piece.

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