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Nicely penned… has a nice flow to it… last line eachoes…
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Thank you 🙏🏻
It means a lot coming from you.
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The imagery of a heart shaped hole is amazing. I love the symbolism and the way you elaborate your feelings. You matched this up well with the music.
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Thank you 🙏🏻 it really means a lot!
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Beautifully penned, Drieks. Incredible lyrics my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Appreciate it Damian!
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Read MoreIt had been months since they witnessed the beauty of the stars twinkling in the sky. The moon itself was already a glow before the war, and now it is lost behind the constant overcast, which lingers....
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I can seriously feel the tension in this piece, Daniel. You’re building this beautifully. My recommendations are to look at other options for the word, ‘snow’. It becomes redundant. Also, Chloe might refer to the men in the shadows as ‘bad boys’, but Gwen and the narrator may want a more specific term – something more specific or sophisticated and relevant to the circumstances.
Your writing is compelling
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Meg, thank you as always. Good thing it is only a freewrite and I’ll be putting it together as a more tuned first draft. I see this turning into a novella.
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Thank you so much Mary! ❤️🙏🏻