Nice one, Damian. A beautiful women can put a man under a spell that makes him forget any pain.

Those are amazing lyrics. Love it;))

hello dearest Damian this is a very great song I can feel your pain❤

Second stanza, first line, did you mean “you’re”?

The repetition really works. And the shield me stanza is so clever and just rolls off the tongue.
Good, good piece of writing.
j.

Awesome! The rhymes and lyrics are infectious. Like an abscess in a tooth! Nice work dude!

The interesting thing about this one is that, depending on how it’s read, it could be a woman or an addiction. Very clever use of words here, my friend!

Can heat it already. Great work. Good luck on the solo album.

Some people shy away from a poem that’s composed of rhyme. I’ve always felt that there’s a finesse to it that has to be refined like a piece of art. You have that quality. It speaks volumes, Damian!

The lyrics are so lovely, I feel the intensity of the emotions…the push and pull, the thrill and the ache. and the repeated chorus of “sweet novocain” lingers like a haunting, addictive melody. I’d love to hear you sing this. It’s beautiful

Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Mary. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I like that it has multiple meanings, I always dig those kind of writes. Bon Jovi style, that’s a unique way of putting it, but
I like it. Thanks for your continued support. Appreciate you.

Damian

I sense there is more to this than presently meets the eye .. Good luck with production .. I suspect it will do well ..
Neville 😎👍

My absolute pleasure ..

This feels like a night mare while you were awake

Asleep but dreaming of being awake and trying to escape torturous thoughts.
They do find us one way or another. We can smoke our joint to space out and away from what’s closing in, but can we
escape it? I don’t know.
I really like the dialect used here…you do that so well and it fits perfectly with the theme.
j.

Hauntingly penned, Ambjr. Great storytelling and powerful imagery my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

Didn’t want too read this through but – of course I did. Your voice was loud and clear whether muttering as you tossed and turned or, were yelling deep down in living hell or – maybe a barbaric battle zone. Or could be the three : a sadistic unholy trinity. Have a feeling that this will linger through my day in great bursts of plasma shooting its way down and down to.. wherever. All too visual -but readers will have his/her own reaction. Cn think of paintings by.. is it Breugel? There’s another.. no matter, your words are more than visual.

hello beautiful Willow this is full of clever verses creating so much feeling ❤

This poem envelops me in its grip.
Sadness, shame, discord…I feel this way sometimes…jokes won’t humor me, pleasantries are the opposite of what I need.
Really strong, strong write.
j.

Powerfully penned, Willow. Into the book it belongs! Excellent write my friend, I felt this one. Appreciate you.

Damian

Superb work.

Amazing, Willow. You keep impressing me with lines like, “slicing pieces off yesterday to feed me.” So strong and beautiful simultaneously. Keep it up. Please. And thanks for the audio version; you know I can’t help but gravitate to that. It is so well done.

A touching tribute to music and musician. This may be the best compliment that a guitar player could ever expect. A feeling of peace and satisfaction is elicited in me.

When I’m practicing guitar a little later, I’ll play you a few bars. 😉

Excellent poem, Fia.

Now that was a song all on its own!

Oh, my–are you talking to me? I’m being silly, of course. I’ve been playing guitar for a long time, so these words have special meaning. I love the image of this damsel being moved by the sound of the strings. Who knows what will happen at intermission?

This flows like a melody. Great piece Fia.

Very nicely poemed Ma’am .. Neville

Beautifully penned, Fia. Into the book it belongs! I always loved this one, cuz. Excellent write. Appreciate you.

Damian

Great piece 👍

Very Stephen King-esque.
You build the momentum like he does…and our imagination scares itself from your words.
j.

Powerfully penned, Ambjr. Amazing imagery my friend, excellent work. Appreciate you.

Damian