hello lovely Fia good evening you are an excellent story teller this is sexy and fun while being thrilling too 💕

Brilliantly penned, Fia. Amazing write, you’re a fantastic storyteller my friend. Dig this, cuz. Appreciate you.

Damian

very nice. lookin forward to next part.

Talk about a steamy build up the suspense here if just strong as can be. And the dialogue flows perfectly like a bunch of ladies on a night out at the bar. And then the guys lining up with drinks for the protagnist is a surpising and original plot line. Fantastic opening.

John

Crimson …nothing is permanent ever.Not joy,not sorrow but despair makes it seem like it will.

Shadows crawl beneath the skin,
where even light cannot seep in.
Hope decays in midnight air
and then despair ignores your prayer.

Take care🙏

In the burn I wither. That is something. Nicely penned, crimsin

And that hard work put in.

Dazed over eyes, lovely visual.
Favorite line
“The court of hard dick and swole nuts will be my representative

Because the deportation of cum in her pussy is all that I have to give,

Have to make it smooth and nasty at the same time.