oh beautiful Fia I can feel your giving heart here so lovely ❤️

Pure compassion here

Perfect! You going to do vocals for it?? Do it!
This is a catchy, lovable song! I love it! You did great!

This is catchy and I loved how you ended it.
Being a home for love is such a lovely thought:)
Singing about it is even better!

Ana 1 ana 2 ana 3 ana 4 Wooooo yeah There are things I wanted to show
so I took off my clothes and then…..Well….anyway, not bad lyrics.
I’d love to hear a melody to it. Nice one Fia. 🙂

Beautifully penned, Fia. Excellent lyrics my friend. A lovely and compassionate write indeed. Appreciate you, Cuz.

Damian

Thank you Damian 😊 🧡

This reminds me of those movies in the 80’s. they seemed to have that theme going through them.

A dark one. I can picture someone standing at his grave. Suddenly they get dizzy and hear him speaking these words. As they snap out of it, they wonder if they were dreaming, or if it was real.

Dude, nope. Not allowed.
I realize that this is creative writing. But it also leans me towards a bit of concern.
Shine your light in here, high.

hello Mr. D we all feel like that sometimes I hope this finds you well and depression has lossened its grip ❤️

Powerfully penned, Mstrmnd. Depression is a powerful beast that twists and distorts everything around us, I speak from experience of course. The important thing is to always look towards the light, if you’re climbing towards that light, eventually you get out of the hole. That’s my best advice. It’s not easy but worth it. Best wishes my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

Thank you all for commenting..it’s just creative writing..I’m in a writing void so going back to my bread and butter and writing about death

Hi,
Your lines so much logic and math words. Excellent English and rhythm flow.

You are great, i don’t know poetry can be so good with technical words.

Jessy Jacob ❤️

This is brilliant, my friend. The collision of mathematical or physical terms and the vivid and figurative imagery with many references hauntingly points to the difficulties to explain the inexplicable.