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    Through The Shadowed Door

    The night lay veiled, no stars above,A silent, frozen tomb.A deadly stillness bound my love,And filled the world with gloom.Where were my guides, my constant light?The stars had fled the sky.A gaping void, an endless night,Where all my hopes...

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    • Well done! An apt poem for this liminal season. 🌼

      • Thank you, Average Joe! I’m glad it felt in tune with the October spirit. There’s something about this liminal season that makes the shadows and the dance feel just right. 🌙🍂

    • It takes a rare skill set to verse a formal poem. Colour me impressed.

    • Hi Rob,
      Thank you! After trying my hand at this, I’ve realized that writing formal poetry is a lot harder than it looks, haha. I’m really glad my attempt still read well — that means a great deal to me. I’ve always admired the discipline and musicality of formal verse, so your words truly resonate. It’s very much appreciated.

    • This is one magnificent piece Romaj. Beautiful, atmospheric, transcending, mesmerizing. You’re a very talented poetess.

      • Thank you! I’m so glad the atmosphere and mood came through. Your kind words are truly appreciated.

    • Outstanding piece. The rhyme scheme is right on, and the meter flows really well. Lastly, the story told plays out like a lilting song. You are surely gifted at writing.
      keep doing what you do, you’re quite good at it.

      • Thank you, Styxian! I’m so glad the rhyme, meter, and story felt like a song to you. This was my first attempt at writing in this style, and it’s definitely harder than it looks, haha. Your kind words mean a lot and really motivate me to keep learning and improving.

    • It’s always a treasure reading your poems. The rhyming is fantastic and the story too.
      I loved the stanza about the quiet song!
      You made this look easy. Great piece chica!

    • Thank you so much! I’m really glad you enjoyed it– and especially that the stanza about the quiet song stood out to you. I had so many different versions of that one, so I’m thrilled it still came through the way I hoped. It definitely wasn’t as easy as it looks, haha, but your kind words make it feel worth the effort!

    • Brilliantly penned, Roma. Excellent flow my friend with your precise trademark imagery on display. I dig this! Appreciate you.

      Damian

    • Thank you so much, Damian! I really appreciate your kind words. I’m glad the imagery and flow resonated with you–it means a lot coming from you. Always grateful for your support!

    • I read this twice to bask in the wonder and transcendence of your poem. The imagery tied together into a dream of exquisitely woven artfully crafted tapestry of high poetic art. I could feel this deep in the marrow of my being. From start to finish this is an impressionist beauty as eloquent as it is profound. The ending felt like a release of your unbounded spirit. A celestial dance of unfettered freedom. Superbly composed.

      John

    • Thank you so much, John. Your words are truly humbling. I’m thrilled the imagery and rhythm resonated so deeply. It means a great deal that you could feel the β€œtapestry” of the poem in that way. Your description of the ending as a celestial dance beautifully captures what I hoped to convey. I really appreciate your generous and insightful reading

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    Maybe you can figure it out.

    Week 1 I can't think of anything.Maybe I'll eat a pop tart or somethin. ~~~ Week 1 1/2... Hmm? Maybe I can write about...nah. How about.......nah. ~~~ Week 2 NuthinMaybe I'll watch a horror movie.The Alien Factor's a good one.It's one of those really...

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    • Hi, Relic! I’ve gotten so used to calling you that over the years, haha. I love how this poem captures the chaotic, procrastinating, wandering mind of the creative process. It’s like watching inspiration play hard-to-get while snacks, horror movies, and classical music are your sidekicks. The pacing — week by week, half-week by half-week — perfectly mirrors that slow, frustrating march toward an idea…until the rain shows up, like a cosmic mic drop! Haha. It’s a funny and oddly hopeful meditation on creativity’s mysterious timing.

      • Thanks for the comment, Romaj. The timing has always been mysterious to me. Just when I think I’m done something pops up out of nowhere. Go figure. :))

    • Powerfully penned, Tim. The life of a writer has peeks and valleys. “I’ve lost my mojo. He ain’t risin.” A reference to the Lizard King?? Probably not, either way I dig the write my friend. Appreciate you.

      Damian

      • Oh yeah, Jim was on my mind when I wrote that for sure. Thanks for the comment.

    • So, Relic, huh? I thought I recognized those keystrokes. Good to see you here, another refugee from that lost cafeteria of broken crockery. Nice write, Tim. It’s like you were looking over my shoulder.

      • LOL Yes, I still check in to WC but I’m here more after the last debacle. It was nice of the owner to finally check in and fix some things. Thanks for the humorous comment, Flatdaddy. Much appreciated. πŸ™‚

        • You are more than welcome. btw, I wrote a scathing letter to the owner about all the downtime, the constant hectoring by folks wanting to “represent us” and the porn — two days later the site was up and running again. Don’t know if my letter helped or not, but I hope that was it. Maybe he’ll pay more attention now. πŸ™‚

          • I believe Jacob also complained but got nowhere. Perhaps your letter was a nudge in the right place. I complained about the porn years ago but to no avail. There’s too much of it and it degrades the site. Hopefully you’re right and the owner pays more attention, but we’ll see. I haven’t got much faith in him.

            • I hear that. I know several others who tried to reach Charley about WC problems, with no results. Perhaps mine got to him at some propitious moment — or maybe it was just coincidence, so long as he fixed it, I don’t care. But then, we are here now, aren’t we? And gee, everything here is just dory hunky, huh?

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    β€’ 8 months ago
    White Coin

    TooΒ manyΒ yearsΒ wasted,Β lifeΒ poorbecauseΒ IΒ spentΒ themΒ unwisely.SoΒ quickΒ toΒ beΒ aΒ have-not,squanderingΒ aΒ wealthΒ ofΒ days.Β BefittingΒ then,Β toΒ stayaΒ silhouette,Β asideyourΒ passingΒ light.MyΒ hatΒ inΒ myΒ hands;haveΒ mercyΒ forΒ me.BeΒ asΒ generousΒ asΒ IΒ hopeΒ youΒ are.MayΒ theΒ moonΒ thatΒ glowsΒ uponΒ you,beΒ aΒ whiteΒ coin,Β enrichingΒ myΒ night.Β Someday,Β whenΒ IΒ burn,whenΒ what'sΒ leftΒ ofΒ mewillΒ beΒ urn'dintoΒ crack-rocksΒ ofΒ bone,chopΒ me,Β linearΒ andΒ longlikeΒ IΒ alwaysΒ was,withΒ aΒ starterΒ creditΒ card.PretendΒ IΒ wasn'tsoΒ closeΒ toΒ worthlessΒ afterΒ all.Β But,Β IΒ can'tΒ stopΒ you,ifΒ youΒ want,fromΒ layingΒ meΒ proneinΒ theΒ ground.HoldingΒ meΒ down,withΒ aΒ tombstone;ComeΒ read,Β anytimewhatΒ IΒ meantΒ toΒ you.AΒ loveΒ thatΒ wentΒ away,spentΒ withΒ quartersofΒ theΒ partialΒ moon.Β ~Β I will tell the other ghoststhatΒ weΒ wereΒ fantastical.You,Β aΒ unicornwithΒ yourΒ blackΒ mane,Β andpiercingΒ eyes.OneΒ ofΒ aΒ kind,Β thatI, the dragonleftΒ theΒ hollowofΒ myΒ mountainΒ for.Β IΒ fakedΒ fireΒ withΒ myΒ words.YetΒ itΒ stillΒ feltΒ warmwhenΒ youΒ wereΒ cold.AndΒ withΒ youΒ whenIΒ stretchedΒ inΒ bed,armsΒ overhead,itΒ wasΒ theΒ closestIΒ everΒ cameΒ toΒ flying.AsΒ yourΒ smileΒ offeredsilentΒ applause.MaybeΒ thatΒ wasΒ myΒ best-effortΒ atΒ rising,Β eclipsingthatΒ whiteΒ coin.AndΒ IΒ canΒ saythatΒ IΒ wasΒ aΒ dragonΒ once.Β ~Β Tonight,Β stillΒ alive,IΒ crackΒ theΒ window;aΒ slotΒ betweenΒ glassΒ andΒ sill.TheΒ oneΒ whiteΒ coinΒ slipsΒ through,andΒ I'llΒ spendΒ myΒ portionΒ onΒ you.With all of your ample generosity;It'sΒ theΒ leastΒ IΒ canΒ do.Β ~~~

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    • I’m proud to say I’m a writer when I read poems like this. It has integrity and image. You’re a great writer, Styx.

    • Well I’m glad that you continue to write in here, Tim. To me, this is a group effort for all of us to enhance our abilities.
      For years, decades even, I kept my material mostly to myself. A shy writer. LOL. Yet, no, open up and give and take.
      Thanks for your encouragement Tim. I do try.

    • This is sweet and has many layers to it. I do like the way you say the moon is a coin.

      • Hello Fia!
        I liked the idea and then I just wrote. But I had no idea where it would go or what the outcome would be. I surprise myself sometimes, with my results. I’m an audience to my own writing, if that makes sense!
        Thank you for the nod, too.

    • This poem reads like a quiet confession beneath the moonlight. I love how the “white coin” becomes a symbol for time, memory, and love — spent, lost, and offered again. The dragon and unicorn imagery gives it a fable-like weight, while the emotions remain deeply human. It’s wistful, tender, and quietly generous in its final offering.

      • Thank you for that thoroughly kind comment. I wasn’t sure what I was after, when I decided to start writing “something’. So it is sort of a mosh perhaps. The contemplations of life and love making it through it all, I suppose?
        Your comment is quite generous, thank you.

    • Your use of symbolism is a joy my friend.

      • Everything is something…
        As I age, I’m trying not to be a hoarder! LOL. Yet I like lots of random things, trinkets, etc. But I do need to thin out my stuff. I may be moving sooner rather than later.

    • Oh how to comment on this! It’s stunning and heartfelt.
      Truly an epic write. My eyes got a little teary and my smile kept smiling throughout the whole read.
      Each section took me somewhere new but the emotion carried over smoothly.

      What a talent you are and a blessing:)

      • Well, I am definitely blessed the past few years. Finding DUP, and the many talented and electic writers, seemed to have inspired me to write more.
        And then, you. Incredible fortune to have you in my life, baby. I love you.

    • Beautifully penned, Mark. Into the book it belongs! Love the depth and layers of this one my friend, excellent storytelling per usual. Appreciate you.

      Damian

      • Thank you Sir Damian. I’m surrounded by some wonderful writers in here, so I have to pull my weight yaknow! LOL

    • Kinda like a romantic Lord Of The Ring or Game of Thrones, like this along with your word play within the piece. Tight

      • What’s up!
        I feel that too many times my endings suck. LOL. Yet I tend to ramble too long in a write as well. I’ve been working on shortening my writes lately. Hopefully it pays off.
        I was definitely looking at this as a bit of a romanticism, yes. Not over done though. Sappy is softening us all. LOL

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    β€’ 8 months ago
    Storms and Stillness

    An approaching storm encroaches onquiet stillnesswhile two candles glowon a desknear a windowwith flames hoveringabove a poet's verse.Far off, thunder rollsunyielding,ready to answer sharplyquarreling clouds.As light flashesacross the skyrain probes the windowwith its delicate fingers.In minutesthe gutter overcrowdswith rainwater...

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    • Mother Nature knows what she is doing before a storm.
      The air gets still but you can feel it. The presence of something powerful brewing.
      This whole piece gave that. I especially loved the stanza about the glass with delicate fingers!
      And I love that pic amigo!

      • Thanks so much, Adel. I’d like to get the picture bigger. I’ll ask Fia about it. πŸ™‚

    • Wonderful. Thoroughly vivid with the descriptive lines sewing it all together. We can see it, feel it even. Excellent poem Tim.

    • Powerfully penned, Tim. Amazing imagery my friend. Appreciate you.

      Damian

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