This is deep and takes the mind to a place that makes you ponder what we are witnessing today, could it be avoided if we just remembered past events instead of letting it just fade into the back ground

Tight rhymes, amigo. Sing your songs, even silently. They still hit.

hello dearest Damian this made me sad the horde is so ficke my friend I feel you ❤️

Well damn. This reads like a whiskey bottle that learned to rhyme. I can practically hear the guitar echoing off brick walls. You really said, “Let’s take a road trip with regret,” and made it sound cool. Brooding in the best way. I’m into it.

A beautifully chaotic board, fitting for a poem about drifting identities, inner shadows, and the erosion of meaning. You’ve written something that feels like a road‑worn blues song fused with psychological noir.

Cool piece. Dark, intelligent & moving.

I got the feel of a New York City late night blues while reading this excerpt of a journey.
C Train, getting off at W 4th St, an urban couple getting frisky and fussy in public, a homeless man marking his territory,
a rat scurrying beneath the 3rd rail as the lone guitarist curates those city blues.

Straight diggin this vibe, D

Much respect

Naaj

“Dark passenger”…now that’s a concept i like to delve into very much. Relating to this wholeheartedly. Maybe a tad too much lol.

I don’t know where this one took others, and I’m refusing to check yet. But to me, this reads as those who are watching evil taking the stage and are documenting what they see. It reminds me of a name much in the news these days, and the vile things perpetrated and orchestrated by him. But that one man couldn’t have done any of those things without a lot of collaboration from a lot of others. Many of whom are currently destroying our world. The blues in the shadows fits this vibe so perfectly. And regardless where it takes people, it takes us, my friend

Not sure why I imagined a literal cat with guitar… But then it has this bluesy feel, nostalgic, that delta-blues style.
Cool write my friend.

Passionately penned, Neville. This is an excellent write my friend with amazing flow. Nicely done per usual. Appreciate you.

Damian

Age will come for everything and everybody. The poem is lovely, though I’m not sure if it’s about a woman, a flower, or something else. Are we lucky or cursed to be so affected by beauty?

I love how you put so much nuance into this piece.

This feels good. Nothing is rushed – it just is in the moment.
It’s like you turned seconds into an un-rushed comfortable stretch into the next.
I love how you created this beginning for your characters and moved them into possibilities with a beautiful sunset.
Even the sheets played a very cool visual – comparing them to sails.

Loved it! And you. I’m so lucky to get both:)

I just changed the title. This one is more appealing.
At any rate, thank you Sir Damian! It was an idea, with a little real person added in. LOL. I’m just trying to stretch my creative muscles a bit!

Well lookie who showed up! How’s you?! It’s good to see you popping in.
I appreciate your visit and comment. I liked the build of this write.
I kept visualizing it off and on for days. It could have been much longer, but i spared myself and the readers. LOL.
It’s more like August-October, though, in reality!
You ready to post some of your own material now? It’s been awhile!

Well, you do have an influence on much of my ideas… The feminine aspects and such.
You’re right, I didn’t think about the easy pacing of this/them. But it’s there huh. Good observation!
Hey, nice avatar! I get to kiss that face!!!!

hello dearest Styxian you are a beautiful storteller I felt the easy way you told it like the tide ebb and flow and like the tide building… I wonder at end if your coffee black you had enough of her caramel… great write ❤️

Great piece dude, totally love it. Do you know at one point the post of the poem “Footprints” popped into our head? Tight

Dude your pieces are great, they are original and relatable. Our mind relaxes while reading your pieces and we see calming things

I really like this Mark. When I joined sites decades ago. this was the kind of poetry I wished to encounter. I’ve learnt so much from Americana (though I have worked with Americans) some of it has been a nefarious experience, but mainly, it has had a massive positive influence in my little Welsh world. Your movies are inspiring.

Well, I’ve mentioned before that my biggest influence are the writings of a little ol Chinese lady! Yet I’ve also taken in so many other writers’ works into my brain, from several cultures. I literally love unique concepts and viewpoints from so many avenues. It does mold us, when we open our minds to what is out there.
So thank you, Rob. But in return, your writes make me think, and thus expand too. You are noticed and learnt from.

Thanks FlatDaddy. I do try!