Not sure how to edit a submission, but somehow, in internet madness, the pen ultimatum stanza was omitted. As if anyone gives a fuck!

submarines tightly knotted in our gulf

diving for my very existence

when I should have been diving for pearls

This sounds like the pain he felt was caused by her not caring. You cared more so you wrote about it. Nicly penned.

It’s good to read your material again. Some writers whack me upside the head with their weighty words. And I don’t mind a bit. It makes me think. It makes me curious. That’s the best drug to me: Curiosity. So thank you for feeding us this drug of yours.

Thank you Fia. In a nutshell, your interpretation is correct

Cheers Mark. I miss ‘chatting’ to the likes of Gary and your good self. For some reason (prob my IT incompetence) I can’t expand my messages on here. I’ll send my email.

so sorry to read this resonates. beyond cyber madness I send the greatest hug. oo, you get to smell my latest aftershave too. sauvage. lol

Flying free into the unknown. I like this

this makes me think of the song Free Falling love this 💕

I guess we all have our interpretations. I see a line of young people heading into a club or hanging out outside it to hear hip hop or rap. Many may disagree, but I see that kind of music as negative and detrimental. Just my two cents.

Tremendous flow here, my friend.

hello dearest Damian either they don’t read the situations or they are goading up to reveal what we know… through manipulation of a situation…they get me all the time this is one of your best in my opinion 💕

Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Mary. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I loved those lines as well, you’re right there is no such thing as a safe place in the world’s current state. Happy to read your commentary again, hope your music projects are going well. Appreciate you.

Damian

“While destruction lies around the bend”

It’s interesting how the word lies changes the entire tone when read as one definition over the other. This is such a cleverly written piece. And powerful, as you excel at, my friend

Fanfuckingtastic Damian. Powerful and packs a tremendous punch!

I kinda get an image of friends drifting apart maybe due to political differences.

Great ink, friend

How often do we project our ideal images or personalities into someone we have a crush on, or admire? I know growing up I did it a lot. I made my female crushes into someone that didn’t exist. It’s often through heartbreak, or age, or wisdom, we learn.

Even though this is short, it holds so much truth to it.

Powerful work. I relate.

10/10🙏

Yes, I know exactly what you mean. But one day I discovered how thrilling and satisfying it is to show one another the raw and naked self in all our greatness and flaws!