Well this is musing. lol
liked the people like privacy they get intrusion part really good

thoroughly enjoyed Damian .. & then some .. Neville

Hellish visions. Intense feeling.
Regards
James

A bit towards the apocalypse in its foretelling, yeah? I also get a “War Pigs” vibe as well (Black Sabbath).
Excellent rhyme scheme as well. Great write Damian.

Wow, one more of your excellent, intense and thought provoking right things, dear Damien! Especially the last verse speaks to me a lot. World most people consider God as all seeing eye that is watching and judging us, all sing that UI energy is just experiencing itself, manifested and the form of a human being. So it is entirely up to us what to do with our lives. Personally, I think it is best to listen to our heart and to our intuition. Why won’t lead us a stray.

That is so true time is a trap it does not go back

Ohh there is so much in this piece. What got me it I wore the ancestors of these jeans…Damn what a line.

Fine, it’s a tie. LOL.
We’re pretty good at mutual stuff…

Hello Damian.
Yeah, why not a praying mantis. I think they are cool as hell actually. Ever since I saw my first one as a kid, as it was eating a caterpillar like a piece of corn on the cob, I’ve been amazed by them. Little green demons, lol.
Thank you much, too, for the nod.

Dude, I have a lot of scars! And several tatts, ahem. -Been quite the life. Nowadays all is mostly mellow and I am thankful for it!
And you can jack my title. When I thought of it a couple of weeks ago, I told Del that I gotta use it somewhere! This write is the result.
Thank you much, Peter.

Powerful. Vivid and sharp.

Clever along with the confusion of “knowing” how things will go. This is short but sharp as hell.

This reads like playing chess.
Or even tennis.
Well done!

Powerfully penned, Sam. Excellent write with a little back and forth going on my friend. Nicely done. Appreciate you.

Damian

I agree it is like a chess move. really good Sam

You always could pen something lovely when you allow yourself. ♥️ nice poem

willow… wow… when I heard this its as if I was sitting on that porch listening to the the story… amazing

Beautiful. I love this. Powerful. Vivid and sharp.

First off, the rhyme scheme is on point. I can tell you really had to pull some crafty words to make the rhyme and tempo stay true. You succeeded. The story within is great, it follows through well and ends with a great mood.
Awesome Willow.

I just listened to the recording! The music matched the tone of your write perfectly.
Even the voice! I’m all for letting go of dead weight in any write. Nicely done:)

Powerfully penned, Willow. Another excellent write that exercises demons while telling this tale of survival my friend. The music sets the mood as the voice delivers the truth while speaking your words with precision. Goosebumps on this one. Amazing read/listen as always. Appreciate you, Sis.

Damian