Great detail. The suspense and direction this poem goes is alluring. Nice work!

Nice slide rhyme and repetition…

Solid imagery in [pioneer’s compass]…

I had a new idea for implementation
of imagery…

Do something like a Carlos Williams
Red Barrel…

Like just insert in…

In a unique and strange way…

Or do such a thing at multiple
sites in the poem…

Perhaps with multiple separate
images…

This is awesome Daniel…

Such creative format…

Clever use of ellipsis
into period to emphasis
the consideration…

Will do! Haha

Peter
My God, your name is so appropriate after reading that piece… sorry, I’m kind of crass at times… but I just wanted to say this sounds more like an every minute thought, not just every day. What happened to that ‘business’ you were attending after coffee?

xoxoxo

That business after coffee remains unresolved 😉

And the Fuck Truck will try to be there. Maybe the next poem will be ‘The Fuck Truck House Call’

Lol I know someone who would use that truck lol
Great work.