Did you surrender all your days
for the longing of the night?
In the hunger of a fever
you can no longer fight?
Did temptation leave you shaken
at the mercy of the heat?
And trembling from the sweat
of a thousand oceans deep?
Did you close your thirsty eyes
just to plunge into the depths?
Could you trust the distant thunder
and still obey your breath?
Were there promises to burn
that would melt all your emotion?
From strangers would you learn
who will mark your sigh as chosen?
In the longing of the fever
did find a little light?
Did you surrender that day
to the hunger of the night?
Great meter and rhyme scheme, along with the lyrical cadence of this. The message itself is timeless, but with your modern flow to it.
Thanks! I appreciate that!
Powerfully penned, Brandon. Excellent write my friend. I concur with Mark (Styxian) it has a lyrical cadence. Your love of listening to music while writing perhaps? I listen to music when I write as well. Nicely done as always. Appreciate you.
Damian