beauty…
is in the eye of the beholder
…so they say…
“as if” my thoughts cajoled her
brilliant…
is the glow of her presence
for all to see
exuding a celestial essence
tonight…
an umbra accentuates her pirouette
for one dance only
a stunningly deep red silhouette
shimmering…
is the veil complementing her body
above an earthen floor
Luna, she dances in sheer esprit
exceedingly…
rare is such privilege for mine eyes
mesmerized in simplistic gaze
innuendo framing my words in guise








I like the way you start off every stanza with a single word and build on it. Lovely work. Welcome to Stars Rite
Fia, thanks for the welcome. Your words are kind. Yes, the single words are different than how others would write their poetry. For me, it creates a pause to help focus on the feelings and emotions I’m trying to express.
Beautifully penned, Angel. Excellent write my friend. Welcome to Stars Rite. Appreciate you.
Damian
Damian, thanks for the appreciative welcome. I see you have posted a lot of material on your page. I look forward to reading some of your work.
Chère A.,
Welcome to this (Fia’s) corner of heaven.
Your verse form is very suitable for setting to music. To use as lyrics I mean.
Maybe…
In the future?
But for now, what a way to start!
If you’re American: thank you.
In all other cases: keep them coming please.
Kind regards, Gus
Duhsjaak, thanks for your welcoming comments. Most of my writing is based on interpretation of musical melody and song lyrics. I’ve never actually thought of my poems as song before. That is an interesting consideration.
I thourghly enjoyed this and welcome to Stars.
Atticus, thanks for your welcome. I am happy you enjoyed my celestial interpretation of the Eagles song.