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Read MoreIt had been months since they witnessed the beauty of the stars twinkling in the sky. The moon itself was already a glow before the war, and now it is lost behind the constant overcast, which lingers....
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Meg, thank you as always. Good thing it is only a freewrite and I’ll be putting it together as a more tuned first draft. I see this turning into a novella.
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Read MoreThe way I feel tonight watching you sleepI love you without words or knowing – Just being. How is it you so transcend the ordinary to me? As if your very scent had made the air come alive. *How long have I loved...
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That is a most beautiful reflective piece. Like a goodnight kiss to transcend all others.
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I’ll let sweet, soft thoughts place the heart as will, does anything else really matter? 🌼
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Count your blessing while you have the moment. Moments pass all to soon. 🌼
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Read Moresome days you want affection then other days you want to be a ho your just not sure if you want to be my ho so you keep stringing me on making sure I don't stray too far with a bat of an eye and...
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Powerfully penned, Nick. Aren’t head games fun? Been there my friend. Appreciate you.
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Yeah, been there more than a few time. Thanks for the read. much appreciated.
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Well thankfully I don’t have this problem. Not that I haven’t had this problem before, and more times than I’d like to admit haha. I wrote this after a coworker of mine was telling me he hadn’t had sex in two years, and the women he tries to get with seem to string him along. Kinda reminded me of when I would have a crush, and just some women would love to keep you at a distance.
BTW: I don’t have a cleaning lady. I’m actually not that rich lol.
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I can seriously feel the tension in this piece, Daniel. You’re building this beautifully. My recommendations are to look at other options for the word, ‘snow’. It becomes redundant. Also, Chloe might refer to the men in the shadows as ‘bad boys’, but Gwen and the narrator may want a more specific term – something more specific or sophisticated and relevant to the circumstances.
Your writing is compelling