I could relate to this poem. It’s not “stupid”. We all fall for “fictional” men and women.

I love the way you use repetition in this piece, and the rhyme is really nice. I like the message. Fictional men have no faults, so they are easy to fall for. It reminds me of an old song called Imaginary Lover by Atlanta Rhythm Section.

Brilliantly penned, my friend. Incredible write. Appreciate you.

Damian

I feel it could be a lot lengthier.

And thank you 😊

Beautifully penned, Daniel. Can’t fix what ain’t broken my friend. Perfect as is. Appreciate you.

Damian

Also,inspired off Alec Benjamin’s single, “”Water Fountain”.

Beautifully penned. Appreciate you.

Damian

A poem of life, death, and time. Well done, Damian!

It sadly resonates with me…in the form of soul searching, in the process of healing.
Great write Damian ⚘️

This really hits so many issues in just one short poem. For some reason it brings to mind the insane deportations…families torn apart. Probably because that’s my fear, my daughter…Muse on, my friend. I’m here for it

Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Adira. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Appreciate you, back.

Damian

Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Tim. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Being an alcoholic who no longer partakes, I’ll say the biggest thing I’ve learned is how many people I hurt. When I was consumed by the disease, I couldn’t see that. I rationalized I was only hurting myself, that’s how hollow I had become. Appreciate you.

Damian

Wise words blended into a tight rhyming poem. You’re good at this stuff!

A philosophical and strong poem. Well done.