Not sure how to edit a submission, but somehow, in internet madness, the pen ultimatum stanza was omitted. As if anyone gives a fuck!

submarines tightly knotted in our gulf

diving for my very existence

when I should have been diving for pearls

This sounds like the pain he felt was caused by her not caring. You cared more so you wrote about it. Nicly penned.

It’s good to read your material again. Some writers whack me upside the head with their weighty words. And I don’t mind a bit. It makes me think. It makes me curious. That’s the best drug to me: Curiosity. So thank you for feeding us this drug of yours.

Thank you Fia. In a nutshell, your interpretation is correct

Cheers Mark. I miss ‘chatting’ to the likes of Gary and your good self. For some reason (prob my IT incompetence) I can’t expand my messages on here. I’ll send my email.

so sorry to read this resonates. beyond cyber madness I send the greatest hug. oo, you get to smell my latest aftershave too. sauvage. lol

Drieks I love the beat that went this piece. I can easily put this on my music list.

hello lovely Fia good evening you are an excellent story teller this is sexy and fun while being thrilling too 💕

Brilliantly penned, Fia. Amazing write, you’re a fantastic storyteller my friend. Dig this, cuz. Appreciate you.

Damian

very nice. lookin forward to next part.

Talk about a steamy build up the suspense here if just strong as can be. And the dialogue flows perfectly like a bunch of ladies on a night out at the bar. And then the guys lining up with drinks for the protagnist is a surpising and original plot line. Fantastic opening.

John

Crimson …nothing is permanent ever.Not joy,not sorrow but despair makes it seem like it will.

Shadows crawl beneath the skin,
where even light cannot seep in.
Hope decays in midnight air
and then despair ignores your prayer.

Take care🙏