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I like how you repeat that couplet at the end. It wraps everything up in a neat package. This is a really cool piece with sociopathic undertones which catch my attention. I love an unreliable narrator. I love an evil genius. A lot of women do… the bad boy syndrome. Boys grow up to be devils. And girls… well, sometimes we invite them in.
Nice piece!
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I really appreciate you for shining your light on this.
A man’s (in this case) internal struggle in such a situation has always intrigued me, yet is beyond alien to me at the same time.
I love exploring my uncharted territory.
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Read MoreKafka: I exist in a corridor without doors,where names crumble before they are read.Each face I create dissolves into the mist,like a crime without a defendant, like love without a letter. Marilyn: I exist in the light that never rests,trapped...
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Brilliantly penned, PAR. Into the book it belongs! This may be your masterpiece my friend, or perhaps one of many masterpieces in your case. It’s incredible dialogue but their tongues speak poetry, not just casual conversation words. Damn, this was Chef’s Kiss. Thanks for sharing my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thanks for being there my friend. ❤
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The back-and-forth banter is done well. The use of questioning each other I enjoyed.
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Thank you, appreciate you!
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The dialogue was great. Your a talent. Well done my friend.
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Viva Keith… I keep waiting for your comments.
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Brilliantly penned, Fia. Once again you’re a great storyteller and I always enjoy the dialogue you write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thank you, Damian
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Your writing shines. Excellent as always!
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Thank you, Keith;))
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Read MoreOnly In My Dreams✨In sleepy dreams of kindred spirits wed …it’s these I run to, chasing through the night.Before my eyes are closed, such dreams are spreadtogether, heart and soul ~ in fevered flight.Live thee, but naught lost...
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The longing in this is palpable. Very beautiful writing.
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Thank you, Alexandria 🙏🏼
Most gratefully for selecting this rather wishfully gentle poem in homage to unrequited desire.
How wonderfully encouraging it is to know you were able to actually feel the emotion of this piece.Your gracious praise gratifies a bard’s humble efforts! ⁓ Richard🖌
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Thank you, Alexandria 🙏🏼
Most gratefully for selecting this rather wishfully gentle poem in homage to unrequited desire.
How wonderfully encouraging it is to know you were able to actually feel the emotion of this piece.Your gracious praise gratifies a bard’s humble efforts! ⁓ Richard🖌
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Maybe so, Adira,
But, not quite as beautiful as You for sharing this rather lovely homage to romantic fate, with your ohhh-so warmly kindred spirit.
What would you want that you cannot have, right now?
One can only wonder and ponder ‘n wish! ⁓ Rascal🖌️
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Powerfully penned, Drieks. Thanks for sharing my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian