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October 5, 2025

Too many years wasted, life poorbecause I spent them unwisely.So quick to be a have-not,squandering a wealth of days. Befitting then, to staya silhouette, asideyour passing light.My hat in my hands;have mercy for me.Be as generous as I hope you are.May the moon that glows upon you,be a white coin, enriching my night. Someday, when I burn,when what's left of mewill be urn'dinto crack-rocks of bone,chop me, linear and longlike I always was,with a starter credit card.Pretend I wasn'tso close to worthless after all. But, I can't stop you,if you want,from laying me pronein the ground.Holding me down,with a tombstone;Come read, anytimewhat I meant to you.A love that went away,spent with quartersof the partial moon. ~ I will tell the other ghoststhat we were fantastical.You, a unicornwith your black mane, andpiercing eyes.One of a kind, thatI, the dragonleft the hollowof my mountain for. I faked fire with my words.Yet it still felt warmwhen you were cold.And with you whenI stretched in bed,arms overhead,it was the closestI ever came to flying.As your smile offeredsilent applause.Maybe that was my best-effort at rising, eclipsingthat white coin.And I can saythat I was a dragon once. ~ Tonight, still alive,I crack the window;a slot between glass and sill.The one white coin slips through,and I'll spend my portion on you.With all of your ample generosity;It's the least I can do. ~~~

14 Comments

Tim
10 months, 1 week ago

I’m proud to say I’m a writer when I read poems like this. It has integrity and image. You’re a great writer, Styx.
Styxian
10 months, 1 week ago

Well I’m glad that you continue to write in here, Tim. To me, this is a group effort for all of us to enhance our abilities.
For years, decades even, I kept my material mostly to myself. A shy writer. LOL. Yet, no, open up and give and take.
Thanks for your encouragement Tim. I do try.
Fia Naturie
10 months, 1 week ago

This is sweet and has many layers to it. I do like the way you say the moon is a coin.
- Styxian
  10 months ago
  
  Hello Fia!
  I liked the idea and then I just wrote. But I had no idea where it would go or what the outcome would be. I surprise myself sometimes, with my results. I’m an audience to my own writing, if that makes sense!
  Thank you for the nod, too.
RomaJ
10 months, 1 week ago

This poem reads like a quiet confession beneath the moonlight. I love how the “white coin” becomes a symbol for time, memory, and love — spent, lost, and offered again. The dragon and unicorn imagery gives it a fable-like weight, while the emotions remain deeply human. It’s wistful, tender, and quietly generous in its final offering.
- Styxian
  10 months ago
  
  Thank you for that thoroughly kind comment. I wasn’t sure what I was after, when I decided to start writing “something’. So it is sort of a mosh perhaps. The contemplations of life and love making it through it all, I suppose?
  Your comment is quite generous, thank you.
Ghosteen
10 months, 1 week ago

Your use of symbolism is a joy my friend.
- Styxian
  10 months ago
  
  Everything is something…
  As I age, I’m trying not to be a hoarder! LOL. Yet I like lots of random things, trinkets, etc. But I do need to thin out my stuff. I may be moving sooner rather than later.
Adelphina
10 months ago

Oh how to comment on this! It’s stunning and heartfelt.
Truly an epic write. My eyes got a little teary and my smile kept smiling throughout the whole read.
Each section took me somewhere new but the emotion carried over smoothly.

What a talent you are and a blessing:)
- Styxian
  10 months ago
  
  Well, I am definitely blessed the past few years. Finding DUP, and the many talented and electic writers, seemed to have inspired me to write more.
  And then, you. Incredible fortune to have you in my life, baby. I love you.
Damian DeadLove
10 months ago

Beautifully penned, Mark. Into the book it belongs! Love the depth and layers of this one my friend, excellent storytelling per usual. Appreciate you.

Damian
- Styxian
  10 months ago
  
  Thank you Sir Damian. I’m surrounded by some wonderful writers in here, so I have to pull my weight yaknow! LOL
I_IS_ ME
9 months, 3 weeks ago

Kinda like a romantic Lord Of The Ring or Game of Thrones, like this along with your word play within the piece. Tight
- Styxian
  9 months, 3 weeks ago
  
  What’s up!
  I feel that too many times my endings suck. LOL. Yet I tend to ramble too long in a write as well. I’ve been working on shortening my writes lately. Hopefully it pays off.
  I was definitely looking at this as a bit of a romanticism, yes. Not over done though. Sappy is softening us all. LOL

Adelphina
10 months, 1 week ago

I enjoyed how this came full circle.
It started with an irritating bumpy grocery car wheel then at the end he didn’t care about his dented rim.
It’s symbolic because it shows movement your write. How your day can start out mundane but end on a high note.
I enjoyed the read:)
Sam Dickens
10 months, 1 week ago

Thank you so much. I’m glad you enjoyed it.
- FlatDaddy
  10 months ago
  
  Ah, another instant classic, Sam. Does your wife known about those toenails? Nice write.
  - Sam Dickens
    10 months ago
    
    Shhhh. She wouldn’t understand.
Kelly Scheppers
9 months, 3 weeks ago

I go through the same dilemma with the shopping carts, Sam. I always get the one that feels like there’s an earthquake commencing. How funny! I loved how you allowed your reader to follow through your excursion from aisle to aisle, frozen foods and pink toenails. What a gem. Much enjoyed…and I love this photo of you, too!
Sam Dickens
9 months, 2 weeks ago

Thank you, Kelly. There are the ones that won’t steer straight, also. I tell my single 34 year-old son to spend more time at the grocery store.

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