Powerfully penned, Brandon. Excellent write my friend. There is a longing in the words of this one. Nicely done.

Damian

There’s a sense of almost but not quite saying. A dance around the edges of something. Damian is right. There is a longing ringing through this one.

Hey Brandon!

There is longing but also a smidge of courage.
Letting someone watch you in real time falling is no joke.
Being vulnerable when it comes to longing isn’t easy.
Takes courage to put yourself out there.
I also enjoyed all the rhyming too.
It’s got meter and rhythm. Very nicely done!

hello dearest Brandon this is deep I understand the need to fulfill your fantasies in real time this is great ❤️

Lots of darkness in this. It seems like an expression of an unhappiness that can’t even be found in dreams or fantasies leading to an ultimate end. Life is always a series of hills and valleys.

Wow l can feel the darkness here. Great write