What a story. I like the banter back and forth between them and how she actually listened to the old man when he talked. The conversation about brings loved one’s back is one I find interesting because would they want to come back to this world in the state it is in? Welcome to Stars Rite

Powerfully penned, D. Excellent storytelling my friend. Welcome to Stars Rite. Appreciate you.

Damian

Interest concept for a short story. The search for immortality in technology. It’s right around the corner which makes this write right on time! Enjoyed the read.

My finance very much wants to have his consciousness downloaded and saved. I’m not so sure. Lol

Based on this artiusing piece, I think in my next life I’d like to be a woman.
Great write.
👍

Passionately penned, Betty. Excellent storytelling per usual really love the layers in your writes. Appreciate you.

Damian

Stinking, reeking, sweating womanly sex – so hot my knees are trembling!

Gardenias and Jasmine! Aren’t you the lucky one, girl?! Cherish the moment! Harriet-Jacqui Furl writing as HJ Furl on Amazon.

Why, why did this have to end? lol I know life continues but this is hot.

What the hell?! You literally described Del. And in another subliminal way that I noticed, because I’m kinda like rain man sometimes. LOL. So what if I’m quirky!
BTW, if I was a female, I’d be lesbian. I get it.
Your erotica is intense and not pornish. That is because you are a skilled writer!
I’m still waiting for more of your heady writes. But I know you’re on a purge. So have at it. Thankfully you’re good at all subject matter.

She is incredible. So I’m not an asshole just for her! LOL.

“Betty” needs to celebrate being Betty across a few topics, etc. You have a very human way with words that everyone can relate to, and wish that they themselves had the inner voice to get down in words. So embrace it all. You are very well rounded.

Really love the go between you and Styxian, great commenting. The piece can’t be denied for it’s steaminess, it’s like watching a flick, tight

You are really good at short story writing. You caught the attention and kept raising the stakes. Oh man its good.

Passionately penned, Betty. Amazing storytelling my friend. This write is also hotter than two demons fucking! lol. Nicely done. Appreciate you.

Damian

Hot Erotica Star! xx

hello dearest ME I myself don’t know where my poems come from this a great glance into your soul ❤️

Thank you, Damian! Highly appreciated “)

This is a hell of a write, my friend — very powerful; but I see a typo, I think, when you wrote, “In a battle of write and earse” when I believe that last word should be “erase,” yes?

Also, you may not be aware of the big LISTEN button that now lives on this page and no doubt many more of yours as well as many others who labour but are not aware of our unwanted AI reader who has hitch-hiked on the work of everyone who has not attached the #excludetx tag to their work.

This is quite mind-blowing.

I admire the punchy and reflective lines through each stanza.

I can sense this is a personal piece, it describes an emotional journey taking place.

It is enlightening and tragic at the same time.

A pleasure to take in. x

Dude…This is a kick ass piece. Your writings always intrigue me.