Nice slide rhyme and repetition…

Solid imagery in [pioneer’s compass]…

I had a new idea for implementation
of imagery…

Do something like a Carlos Williams
Red Barrel…

Like just insert in…

In a unique and strange way…

Or do such a thing at multiple
sites in the poem…

Perhaps with multiple separate
images…

This is awesome Daniel…

Such creative format…

Clever use of ellipsis
into period to emphasis
the consideration…

Will do! Haha

Engaging… really pulled me in…

I’m so glad you liked it. Thanks for giving me a read!
xoxo

Thanks, HJ. It’s amazing I made it through school

I’m glad you think so!

Very well written and build up. I’m going to have to read more of your stories!

I think you should undress me more often.

Ice water, then a shower. You do this every time.

I’ll give you a warm one if you touch the right button…
Thanks for checking this, babe.

I mean, is there any other kind of ambrosia? I’ve got your cream rinse right here, girl.

Pass the tissues though I’m not crying.
Steamy peace.