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RICHARD "Rascal" JENKINS posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
GOODNESS, TFT!
Now, THAT is a proper Sonnet … it’s obvious you’ve done your homework.
Your creativity sparks, emotion sings, and diction dances. And, I like your use of elision. Could use a bit’a punctuation.
See critique and edits below:I said I don’t do THIS. POems that behave (STRESS-STRESS / a count long)
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much appreciated. good luck convincin me to use punctuation 😉
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Now, Syr Bard
Post it so everyone can enjoy your amazing flexibility and creativity with a poet’s pen.
I’ll be first in line to review it for you! ⁓ Richard
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Read MoreI recall my first touchof the most intimate youthe back seat of the vana blanket to conceal the viewI sneaked my young handsbeneath the waist of your clothesand reached down with my fingersdestination unknownyou were so youngI didn’t know...
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Wow! That was a very sensual reminiscence. You really brought the imagery here
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Thank you, Willow. I’m glad you could see it!
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Hoi hoi
Wow! If this isn’t a declaration of love, I don’t know what is.
What a beautiful write!
A great thing you posted it!Kind regards, Gus
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Thank you for seeing this piece as it is, a declaration of love. I appreciate you!
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I enjoy writing about this type of memory. Thanks for reading! Always grateful for your visits and comments.
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Loss of innocence written with impressionist imagery that captivate me as I read. Very well done indeed.
John
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Exceptional ink my friend .. thank heaven for memories eh & of course for poetry .. Neville 😎👍
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So beautiful, so dark, so you Brenda. Excellent piece my friend.
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good mornig dearest Keith I’m happy you liked it I was worried I went too far but I never worried about that before why start now right? thank you my friend ❤️
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Redemption with a hollow scream. Love it, Brenda.
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hello dearest Adagio good morning thank you graciously I deeply appreciate you ❤️
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hello lovely one good evening thank you just a feeling that overcame me last night I wasn’t sure if I should write this I’m happy it worked for you ❤️
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Hauntingly penned, Brenda. Phenomenal write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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As we read this we think of our darkness and how it hungers always for more. We constantly watched for the slightest weakness, even inattention is a weakness. But to have it’s icy call within our darkness and acceptance, deeelish
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hello dearest Me I think of the parst of space that are empty I find peace there it is a heavy dark… there I can be myself I go wandering…someday when I pass from this dominion I hope to explore other plains of existence thank you so much for you very apt comment ❤️
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Hoi hoi Chère C.,
Love the write.
And love the artwork too.
Kind regards, Gus-
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hello dearest Gus good evening thank you most graciously I love the picture as well I thought it went well with the poem ❤️
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This reads more like a short story then a poem. I love it. The darkness and moodiness crawls into my skin. As I read, I love the atmosphere you created with your words and with the image. Marvelous Brenda. xo
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good morning dearest Keith I think you’re right I should have listed it as a series it well be part of a bigger story thank you gracioulsy for taking in the mood ❤️
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Father, I confess to ink the silence, haunting the moonless nights. Well done, Brenda.
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thank you graciously dearest Adagio for a very beautifully poetic comment ❤️
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Powerfully penned, Brenda. Amazing write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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