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RICHARD "Rascal" JENKINS posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
GOODNESS, TFT!
Now, THAT is a proper Sonnet … it’s obvious you’ve done your homework.
Your creativity sparks, emotion sings, and diction dances. And, I like your use of elision. Could use a bit’a punctuation.
See critique and edits below:I said I don’t do THIS. POems that behave (STRESS-STRESS / a count long)
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much appreciated. good luck convincin me to use punctuation 😉
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Now, Syr Bard
Post it so everyone can enjoy your amazing flexibility and creativity with a poet’s pen.
I’ll be first in line to review it for you! ⁓ Richard
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So beautiful, so dark, so you Brenda. Excellent piece my friend.
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good mornig dearest Keith I’m happy you liked it I was worried I went too far but I never worried about that before why start now right? thank you my friend ❤️
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Redemption with a hollow scream. Love it, Brenda.
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hello dearest Adagio good morning thank you graciously I deeply appreciate you ❤️
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hello lovely one good evening thank you just a feeling that overcame me last night I wasn’t sure if I should write this I’m happy it worked for you ❤️
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Hauntingly penned, Brenda. Phenomenal write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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As we read this we think of our darkness and how it hungers always for more. We constantly watched for the slightest weakness, even inattention is a weakness. But to have it’s icy call within our darkness and acceptance, deeelish
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hello dearest Me I think of the parst of space that are empty I find peace there it is a heavy dark… there I can be myself I go wandering…someday when I pass from this dominion I hope to explore other plains of existence thank you so much for you very apt comment ❤️
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Hoi hoi Chère C.,
Love the write.
And love the artwork too.
Kind regards, Gus-
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hello dearest Gus good evening thank you most graciously I love the picture as well I thought it went well with the poem ❤️
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This reads more like a short story then a poem. I love it. The darkness and moodiness crawls into my skin. As I read, I love the atmosphere you created with your words and with the image. Marvelous Brenda. xo
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good morning dearest Keith I think you’re right I should have listed it as a series it well be part of a bigger story thank you gracioulsy for taking in the mood ❤️
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Father, I confess to ink the silence, haunting the moonless nights. Well done, Brenda.
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thank you graciously dearest Adagio for a very beautifully poetic comment ❤️
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Powerfully penned, Brenda. Amazing write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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