Okay, that is gut-wrenching. To lay there and live a slow death that you did not sign up for. Not right at all.
This is executed well

Thanks for the thoughtful comment Fia.

It’s not right and it’s not wrong , it’s just the way it is.Like everything in life,even suffering is impermanent.

🙏

Quite moving..thank you for sharing

I’ve often felt that pain is preferable to apathy. That quiet passing out of space. This haunts & hurts. So often the case, & always hard

First the Technical: Excellent consistency with meter, beautifully executed rhyme.
Composition: Incredible depth. As Willow noted, the piece reflects a falling away, a loss of touch and intimacy with no explanation. It’s a death of sorts, and you’ve painted it perfectly. Really well done.

Great write Fia.

I think we’d agree we aren’t our bodies.
Somewhere in the spaces between our cells , our atoms, is our consciousness…but that’s not us either.
We cling to our notion of self but really are non self.Nothing.

Phenomenally penned, Fia. This was a powerful write my friend, I think our soul is our mind. It makes sense to me anyways. Appreciate you.

Damian

The Heart & Soul is everything to a person’s existence. The brain is just there to put it into words. Great piece Fia. xo

Really seems to be a struggle to get the formatting to stay the same. Strike two. 😠

Lol, take two, and take three to get the picture aligned. I make simple things hard. Its a gift.

But more importantly, thank you for your sweet compliment. Fools are getting rarer but players are out there in record numbers. Nice to meet another of the vanishing breed. 🌼

I swear to all things fuzzy, if I could get that bookmark function to work, this would be well & truly bookmarked! Amen & pass the bottle! Beautiful…

Thanks reading and sharing your thoughts. Its true, “Those that have it at any level are lucky and blessed.”

Powerfully penned, Drieks. Into the book it belongs! Love the wordplay and phrasing my friend. Nice flow as well. Appreciate you.

Damian

Awesome poem. The words and rhymes are acidic!

Thank you Mary!
And you inspire me to keep writing with compliments like that!