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RICHARD "Rascal" JENKINS posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
GOODNESS, TFT!
Now, THAT is a proper Sonnet … it’s obvious you’ve done your homework.
Your creativity sparks, emotion sings, and diction dances. And, I like your use of elision. Could use a bit’a punctuation.
See critique and edits below:I said I don’t do THIS. POems that behave (STRESS-STRESS / a count long)
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much appreciated. good luck convincin me to use punctuation 😉
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Now, Syr Bard
Post it so everyone can enjoy your amazing flexibility and creativity with a poet’s pen.
I’ll be first in line to review it for you! ⁓ Richard
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Read MoreLADIES ROOM CONQUEST You are crying...I've been there and back......lean on me! It's ok...you don't have togo back out there! My name is Paula.Nice to meet you!You have a pretty smile. Yes you do!I have no reason to lie.You're shaking. Come here!I will comfort...
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Cotton Candy is called Fairy Floss in Australia.
“She tastes like fairy floss”
Fact or fiction, you’re writing is always terrific and always grammatically correct.🌻
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Thanks. I think I need to find more meaning in my life. I post everyday and have put together 2 books that no one has read. It’s starting to seem pointless. I may take a break soon or just give up.
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Hoi hoi
Love this one.I went to a lezzie bar (one of the first in Amsterdam) with a lady friend of mine. It wasn’t really common for a guy to be there and my bum was lovingly slapped by some of the women on their way to the loo.
That’s why I know that there is always something going on in the loo.
My idea for you would be to drink a little less and love a little more. Love as in making love.
And never give up trying for happiness and very good writes….But hey, it’s only me. I read your writes no matter what.
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Keep on write and keep on tasting the cotton candy. Don’t give up.
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You are super talented. Don’t leave!
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Read MoreI recall my first touchof the most intimate youthe back seat of the vana blanket to conceal the viewI sneaked my young handsbeneath the waist of your clothesand reached down with my fingersdestination unknownyou were so youngI didn’t know...
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Wow! That was a very sensual reminiscence. You really brought the imagery here
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Thank you, Willow. I’m glad you could see it!
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Hoi hoi
Wow! If this isn’t a declaration of love, I don’t know what is.
What a beautiful write!
A great thing you posted it!Kind regards, Gus
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Thank you for seeing this piece as it is, a declaration of love. I appreciate you!
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I enjoy writing about this type of memory. Thanks for reading! Always grateful for your visits and comments.
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Loss of innocence written with impressionist imagery that captivate me as I read. Very well done indeed.
John
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Exceptional ink my friend .. thank heaven for memories eh & of course for poetry .. Neville 😎👍
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Read MoreGrandma's Blanket It's red and beige and Grandma gaveit to me when I was seven, just beforeshe died. It's been stolen a coupletimes by family but I tracked it down. My heavy Indian blanket used to cover me completely as a...
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