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Read MoreHow can I competeShe had trained you for her desiresShe tells you to count before you beginYou take deep breaths, trembling You either fear heror you desire her Lust or disgustRides you hard She tells you she wants you to play something...
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Thank you, Jacob ;))
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![Profile picture of Backdeckbenny (Peter)]()
Fia….I thought it was more about a femdom sorta thing….still good either way.👍
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Haha..well you never know when I could pop a poem like that out. Thank you, Peter;))
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I just can’t imagine any hot blooded music loving fella NOT enjoying this & DEEPLY .. Bravo Mistress F .. Neville 😎👍
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Thank you, Neville.(big smile here);))
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excellent write
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Thank you, twoffthythree ;))
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Beautifully penned, Fia. Music is a seductive lady, excellent write my friend. Appreciate you, cuz.
Damian
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Thank you, Damian;)) Music is exactly that,
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Fia this was smoking. I love piano music and this is one of the most creative poems on seduction of a pianist I have read. I felt the flame of his helplessness because her womanly powers. Sizzling.
John
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Thank you, John;))
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Read MoreSurrounded by tombstones and monuments, my co-worker and I trudged through the cemetery in six inches of fresh snow. She walked a hundred feet ahead of us. We'd never seen her before. She wore black: Black hat, black boots, black gloves,including...
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Spooky, Tim.
I do like this a lot. Reminds me of a song by Joan Baez called “Long Black Veil”–I imagine you can find it online.
You give us the setting, providing atmosphere with your description.
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I’ve heard the song in the past. It’s a good one and I believe it’s been covered by many others. Thanks for the comment, J. 🙂
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I do love the ambience of graveyards Tim. A haunting tale which sent a little shiver up my spine. I also know the song Jacob refers to by Joan Baez. I am a huge fan of hers.
Chris
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Thanks for the comment, Chris. I’m glad you’re here.
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Thank you. Struggling with navigating, but will take it slowly.
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![Profile picture of Damian DeadLove]()
Hauntingly penned, Tim. Amazing storytelling my friend. Incredible write. Appreciate you.
Damian
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I appreciate the comment, Damian. Thanks. 🙂
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This is a great and chilling story. The buildup is perfect, from the quiet snow to the sudden disappearance, and the detail of the hat on the monument is a fantastic touch.
I may not know Eva Longstreet, but in life and now in death, she sure knows how to make an entrance and leave an impression.
Great write Tim
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Thanks a bunch for the comment, Romaj.
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Yes cemetery loved it (your poem ) but not necessarily the place !
I’m not afraid of ghosts I know they exist. I feel they can’t hurt usLoved your descriptives of the mentioned Eva. Felt romantic almost! And I wonder if she was meeting her lover or someone a bit cold for a romp in the snow ⛄️
Loved the write
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Ha-ha Who knows what ghosts think when they’re roaming around Julie. Thanks so much for the comment. 🙂
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Chilling words. There is excitement at the fear the graveyard evokes.
Regards James
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Thanks for you comment, Knight. 🙂
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Hi Tim!
We have a back building at work that is right beside a graveyard. There are always internet issues down there!
We all believe it must be due to spiritual activity.
But it sucks when the internet drops and you haven’t saved the file yet! GrrrThis write is perfect for the season. Makes me want to try a ghost tour. lol
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Thanks so much for the comment, Adel. And good luck on that tour. Perhaps you’ll run into a ghost or two. :0
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Read MoreA million times I've shed my tearsThough still her touch I miss.Without her death, we could have livedUnbridled in our bliss. Our future lives were seized by grief,I'm hostage now to pain.That jocund voice no longer sings,My pleas, I cry...
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I felt this. I am sure she is there waiting.
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Thank you Fia. 🙂
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![Profile picture of Damian DeadLove]()
Powerfully penned, Tim. Grabbed me by my heartstrings my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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I’m glad you liked it, thank you. 🙂
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This is a tender and heartbreaking piece.
The rhythm and rhyme carry the weight of grief so gracefully, and the final stanza is especially powerful. offers such a moving sense of hope and reunion – it’s both sorrowful and comforting at the same time.
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Thanks for reading, Romaj. 🙂
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crimson, this is sweet. I understand how you feel
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hello beautiful Fia he made me smile so I thought I would share it thank you❤
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Beautifully penned, Brenda. They’re amazing like that, a lovely write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Read MoreOnce in a while,as though pulled in by some desireor force,some decide to take a ride backto Cafe Town.But they find a different neighborhood. One that has since fallen into disrepair.It's not always a long visit.They've discovered going back...
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It does sound like a town that has been forgotten. You described it well, so sad.
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Yes, as sad as it is there was plenty of time to improve things, but…. Thanks Fia.
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I lived there for 17 years. But had to move, the police moved out and glitches moved in. They set up tents and overtook the place.
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I don’t know whether to laugh or sigh at your comment. It was such a great place at one time. Let’s hope this site is a new and better beginning for most of us from Cafe Town. 🙂 Thanks J.
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Powerfully penned, Tim. Incredible write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thanks for the input, Damian. :)))
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I love this piece. You create an excellent and interesting metaphor and you carry it through from beginning to end.
It really works and we feel the relationship between the poem’s subject and the piano.
nicely done, Fia.
j.