Powerfully penned, Drieks. This is a deep and profound piece my friend. Incredible write. Appreciate you.

Damian

G’morning, Drieks 🌤️

What a creative title, and that photo choice (with your pen name attractively laid) is sheer eye candy, perfectly setting the ambient mood for what’s to come.

“To hell with the common.
I lost interest to follow the herd,
please sell me to the devil i’m about to summon.”

Sometimes, nothing much appears to be what it seems … so, why not throw caution to the wind, live it wild ‘n free, the way so many would love to be!

I truly admire your creative metaphors – with their vibrantly-vivid, emotive impact, and what conscientious poetess or poet could help but admire your spot-on line-breaks, the way you’ve utilized soft and exact rhymes to set rhythm and hold the reader’s interest with fascinating imagery throughout … obviously, NOT your first poetic rodeo.

How relatably beautiful your pen’s voice speaks to the captive mind’s-eye, Drieks.
Wondrously shared, Dear Poetess! ⁓ Richard🖌️

The metaphor of “Indiana Jones-ing” through depression is brilliant, painting the struggle as a reckless adventure where survival is uncertain. The imagery of webs, eight-legged freaks, and sanity creaking creates a vivid sense of entrapment of a mind pushed to its limits. What stands out the most is the refusal to conform, the rejection of the common, the questioning of perfection. It’s a voice screaming against expectation, demanding to be understood rather than advised.

Powerfully penned, Drieks. Thanks for sharing my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

I like how you repeat that couplet at the end. It wraps everything up in a neat package. This is a really cool piece with sociopathic undertones which catch my attention. I love an unreliable narrator. I love an evil genius. A lot of women do… the bad boy syndrome. Boys grow up to be devils. And girls… well, sometimes we invite them in.

Nice piece!

Great job with the rhyming in this… engaging… carried me along…

Brilliantly penned, Drieks. Incredible lyrics my friend. Tight rhymes, incredible wordplay, great phrasing, nicely done. Also dig the music. Appreciate you.

Damian

This is so good. I can hear this as an opening to a show.

Love this couplet
“Sanity was the place you thought you craved.
Serenity was a fable purposely misplaced.”

You have some great lines in this piece.

Thank you for the compliments Mary 🙏🏻
I’m planning on writing a poem alternating between English and my native language.
Not sure how that’ll work out!

” Blood stained feathers smeared across cross wearing habits.”

This hits home

Much respect

Naaj

Brilliantly penned, Drieks. This is a magnificent write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

What a fantastic final line summary, Girl!