I can see why there is silence and then applause. It is poetic the way she decided to leave this earth the moment she arrived, but still, that is something. I like sending it to the senator, showing what happens to people with budget cuts to needed medications and research for a cure.

I read this late last night and had to log off before I commented.
This is intense. For as dark as it is it has a lot of intimacy.
Through you the audience got to know her and in turn care about her.
Bravo!👏

A bit macabre, here. Quite appropriate for this time of year. Poe might be jealous. Very good writing, I’d say.

ha-ha, it would have to be next to nuns. 🙂 Time has a way with our minds when there’s only you and a long road, but wondering where time went and the weird things that can go through the mind is rather odd sometimes. I’ve been there. Thankfully I haven’t experienced any torturous itching. 🙂

Good one. 🙂

“What if I’m Pregnant.” lol okay this had me going.

Loved this. Gave me a big smile along with profound thoughts on the journey of life. Well written indeed. Just flowed for me as I read. Very enjoyable road trip along the avenues of time and space.

John

I like the breaks of “and yet” This is great theme for this month, I enjoyed this.

Thanks, Fia. I am so glad you like the line breaks. I feel that, with certain writes, visual presentation can be important to how the piece is perceived. This is one of those.

I caught the curse vibe in this.
It slowly built up like a possession of his mind and actions
Until it turned into an obsession. I enjoyed devotion in this.

This is a right good salty tale, especially so since it comes from an Air Force dude. (Makes me a bit jealous, it does) Never see the shore again? I know the feeling, but here’s a tip–if you look to that fluid horizon at night, you will often see tiny lights.