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RICHARD "Rascal" JENKINS posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
GOODNESS, TFT!
Now, THAT is a proper Sonnet … it’s obvious you’ve done your homework.
Your creativity sparks, emotion sings, and diction dances. And, I like your use of elision. Could use a bit’a punctuation.
See critique and edits below:I said I don’t do THIS. POems that behave (STRESS-STRESS / a count long)
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much appreciated. good luck convincin me to use punctuation 😉
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Now, Syr Bard
Post it so everyone can enjoy your amazing flexibility and creativity with a poet’s pen.
I’ll be first in line to review it for you! ⁓ Richard
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twofiftythree posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
I said I don’t do this. poems that behave
that count their beats and beg to sound profound
but here I am the fool you couldn’t save
all rhyme and reason. love still hangin roundI hate this form. it’s polished. cold. confined
like scrubbin blood just so it stains again
I tell myself to leave your heart behind
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Read MoreLADIES ROOM CONQUEST You are crying...I've been there and back......lean on me! It's ok...you don't have togo back out there! My name is Paula.Nice to meet you!You have a pretty smile. Yes you do!I have no reason to lie.You're shaking. Come here!I will comfort...
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Cotton Candy is called Fairy Floss in Australia.
“She tastes like fairy floss”
Fact or fiction, you’re writing is always terrific and always grammatically correct.🌻
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Thanks. I think I need to find more meaning in my life. I post everyday and have put together 2 books that no one has read. It’s starting to seem pointless. I may take a break soon or just give up.
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Hoi hoi
Love this one.I went to a lezzie bar (one of the first in Amsterdam) with a lady friend of mine. It wasn’t really common for a guy to be there and my bum was lovingly slapped by some of the women on their way to the loo.
That’s why I know that there is always something going on in the loo.
My idea for you would be to drink a little less and love a little more. Love as in making love.
And never give up trying for happiness and very good writes….But hey, it’s only me. I read your writes no matter what.
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Keep on write and keep on tasting the cotton candy. Don’t give up.
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You are super talented. Don’t leave!
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V3L4 should be: What’s next, a ballad? Maybe, one or two.