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GOODNESS, TFT!
Now, THAT is a proper Sonnet … it’s obvious you’ve done your homework.
Your creativity sparks, emotion sings, and diction dances. And, I like your use of elision. Could use a bit’a punctuation.
See critique and edits below:I said I don’t do THIS. POems that behave (STRESS-STRESS / a count long)
that count their beats and…Read More![Profile Photo]()
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much appreciated. good luck convincin me to use punctuation 😉
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Now, Syr Bard
Post it so everyone can enjoy your amazing flexibility and creativity with a poet’s pen.
I’ll be first in line to review it for you! ⁓ Richard
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I said I don’t do this. poems that behave
that count their beats and beg to sound profound
but here I am the fool you couldn’t save
all rhyme and reason. love still hangin roundI hate this form. it’s polished. cold. confined
like scrubbin blood just so it stains again
I tell myself to leave your heart behind
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Hi, Redzone! I welcome you to “BACK TO POETRY BASICS” and would like to invite you to join-in on our Sonnet lesson (below). It’s easy: just read and follow along. I look forward to sharing with you. ⁓ Richard🖌
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Hi Richard,
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oops didn’t mean to send that too short of a reply. I read your paper? instructions about the nature of and what constitutes a formally written English Sonnet. I am afraid I have only ever attempted one. If I can find it I will post in the “Back To Poetry Basics” group. This group was mented to me by Valuptas Whispers Unholy. and then I saw Fia’s…Read More
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C’mon, Curt, join-in. There’s nothing like taking advantage of an opportunity when it present itself, and it’s FREE! With your creative talents, it would be most thrilling to read your version of a proper Sonnet, and then you’ll know how from then on. : )
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Hi, TFT! I welcome you to “BACK TO POETRY BASICS”, and would like to invite you to join-in on our Sonnet lesson (two posts below). It’s easy: just read and follow along. I look forward to sharing with you. ⁓ Richard🖌
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Okay, I am stuck with this, but I am trying.
Was born with eyes wide open
To be prepared for the truth
No one seemed to care or wanted to offend
What had happened on the roofTime withholds memories in a box
We crawl, then stand, and eventually walk
As a rusty key enters an unforgiving lock
Uttering words before learning to talk6 Comments-
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Fia, you really need to study the lesson more thoroughly for a complete understanding.
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I am going to. By next week it should be better.
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I hope so … the topic is very interesting, if you can get it into proper Sonnet format. : )
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I’m trying
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For examples, you might read and study some of my posted sonnets, applying what you’ve learned from the lesson to become a bit more familiar with the Sonnet format … you should have it down by next week’s session. It doesn’t have to be perfect, just show a basic understanding we can build on.
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okay
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“ BACK TO POETRY BASICS ”
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This group is created to help those who want to learn new techniques in poetry, to brush-up on, and/or refine their skills.
The group is led by longtime poetry teacher, Richard “Rascal” Jenkins.
If you have questions about any aspect of poetry, he’s a wealth of knowledge and is always available to lend a hand or furnish answers.
Just message and he’ll respond.
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“DUE TO LITTLE INTEREST SHOWN,”
Sessions are on hold until further
notice; maybe, resuming this year.
Anyone interested, message me.
I wish you all “HAPPIEST WRITING.”
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Just drop-in and follow the lesson posted on your left. Anything you want to know – not included – post it on this site after you’ve finished reading, and Richard will answer.
(taking notes or copy/pasting/printing is a great idea that will serve you well as a reference while studying.)
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V3L4 should be: What’s next, a ballad? Maybe, one or two.