I can seriously feel the tension in this piece, Daniel. You’re building this beautifully. My recommendations are to look at other options for the word, ‘snow’. It becomes redundant. Also, Chloe might refer to the men in the shadows as ‘bad boys’, but Gwen and the narrator may want a more specific term – something more specific or sophisticated and relevant to the circumstances.

Your writing is compelling

That is a most beautiful reflective piece. Like a goodnight kiss to transcend all others.

I’ll let sweet, soft thoughts place the heart as will, does anything else really matter? 🌼

Count your blessing while you have the moment. Moments pass all to soon. 🌼