Love nurtures
touch is not the only one that can make bodies melt
A million words spoken in love in silent
That can only felt.
People grew but love nourishes
Makes them together
Never seen that trust
Love may be expressed at the first sight
Or love over the years took time to blossom
True lovers where they can be making them unite
O my Rain did you see my love to bloom
With his silent sight with his silent steps
That follow her and make her his life
Still adoring her and loving her only to be with her
Two stars plucked were given to me, and
They met me today and yesterday
Blushing me in blues and soft as rose
Pink in touch and hugs
I knew I miss both
Both missed more than I
We reunite only to live for more and more in together
As we march towards our home in dreams but in realm.
Usha Jacob
I struggled at some lines to understand what You really meant, but all in all this is lovely and it reads to me as an epic tale at the last two verses.
you can ask me which lines are not clear, i will try to explain to you.
Have a good night.
Usha Jacob.
“Love is not the only touch that can make melt” I think this line is a bit confusing.
Nowadays, people feel love is seeking pleasure, where bodies melt. Souls melt in a body, and it is much higher than who thinks love is getting together, but i am in love with my man much deeper than what the world sees love as, we get melted more beyond the physical pleasures. Here in my context, we never so far touched each other we are in love since time has begun, and we were not that far that the world has made us apart for their benefits. Still we touch we feel from far.
I was thinking this might mislead to few, with your query i could made few understand.
Usha Jacob.
It’s not that I couldn’t understand the content, it’s how you build your sentence, it should be more like this,
Love isn’t only about the touch that make us melt,
or,
The touch is not the only thing that makes us melt
The way You wrote your sentence is not right.
Yea you are right, i wrote how my mind directs, then i dont change much of my thoughts. But you mentioned two ways which are right, and my lines also are getting the same meaning i feel.
Life is not too complex, when you could guess how it should be then that is my point that life could be understood without explaination even when people write we could guess what the writer is writing, but few people whose mind still also not accept the writer thoughts and they turned around neck and still cant find the nose. To them whatever we write it is not needed. For me even if you show ear and say nose, i say and i know what ear is and how to use it for removal of dust inside then we hear better, few poke inside too much and get deaf.
Usha Jacob,
i think i cleared your question in a clear way.
Thank you 🙂 🙏🙏
You are welcome, thank you for dropping review.
Usha Jacob.
Great writing.
Thank you,
Usha Jacob.
I am not an expert in English nor it’s my first language, I make mistakes and I welcome my friends suggestions to make my poems btter, If You can’t accept a good advice then please don’t ask for a good criticism, your sentence is written wrongly (as few other lines too) and if I could get your meaning it doesn’t mean that all others will do, it’s confusing for the reader, there is music that is smooth and pleasant to the ears, and there is noise that’s disturbing to the ears, yet both music and noise are sounds the ears can hear it.
i dont understand why you are thinking i havent considered as good critiicism. Sorry for misunderstanding. I agree with you i need to correct sentences, there is no edit button to correct it.
Thank you
Usha Jacob.
Hi again my friend, misunderstanding can happen between languages and that’s ok. If You want to edit your poem (i.e the sentence) You should go to your Dashboard and from there cilck on the arrow under your poem then the pen that appears, if this didn’t help let me know and I try to explain it more through a message.
Done.
Thank you,
you know more than me…
Usha Jacob.